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Showtime (Free verse) by INTRANSIT
Never underestimate the power of God. For forty-five minutes we watched his white veins flash across the sky, beer in our hands, as he stumbled drunk around his penthouse apartment looking for a contact, crashing into everything. A cricket plugged in then tried to discharge itself. Frogs laughed, Cicadas anguished. Fireflies lit like random lighters . The wind sometimes howled and the trees applauded. All the while, God never made a sound. For forty-five minutes we watched this. We should have stayed up with him. But we didn't.

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.428571
Weighted score: 5.1152606
Overall Rank: 5997
Posted: July 25, 2005 9:02 PM PDT; Last modified: July 25, 2005 9:02 PM PDT
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[2] LilMsLadyPoet @ 152.163.100.67 | 26-Jul-05/10:14 PM | Reply
man! This actually got my attention, as I kept on reading, and then you dropped the ball! CHOP! END> Nothing...it fell on its face! finish the thought here...you were rambling on with a story, that must have been leading somewhere...finish it!
[7] Dovina @ 212.74.167.76 | 27-Jul-05/6:14 AM | Reply
God never made a sound, but you tell us not to underestimate God. The white veins were not God, nor were the fireflies? The laughing frogs and anguishing cicadas have it right. What are you, the observer, anguishing with, if not the sounds of God? Say what you mean, man! Or as CS Lewis said, the skill of writing is to know exactly what you want to say, and to say exactly that.
[10] jessicazee @ 64.12.116.135 | 28-Jul-05/1:41 AM | Reply
You totally should have stayed up. Don't capitalize "cicadas." Also, I love this. 9.8
[9] Dan garcia-Black @ 69.237.239.153 | 28-Jul-05/7:24 PM | Reply
Was this at a garden after dinner? I was busy getting twenty pieces of silver from my NEW powerful friends at the time.
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