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Noble oboe now sings every next saturday evening

Member since 2005 · Posted 23 Jul 2005 · 6 comments

Pale meadows streaming blue waves of Tuscany dreams fellowships embark upon the Moonbeam Starship Satellite willows lead the way to home and lost memories what pure delight.

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[6] Dovina 24-Jul-05/6:24 AM Reply

I'm a little under a Denken Weizen at the moment, but are there realy meadows in Tuscany? I do like to board a starship with its bark and all, of willows and such wherever the memories lead.

[n/a] ALChemy › Dovina 24-Jul-05/8:34 AM Reply

I'm pleased with your response. What is a Denken Weizen anyway?

[6] Dovina › ALChemy 25-Jul-05/6:32 AM Reply

I,m not pleased with it. Weizen is German beer. Dunken, probably spelled wrong, is the dark vaqriety.

[6] LilMsLadyPoet 26-Jul-05/10:32 PM Reply

I thought the use of 'upon the Moonbeam Starship Satellite" a little long-winded..and ? unclear...otherwise I like it. I was thinking...> upon the moonbeamed__________ (something).

[n/a] ALChemy › LilMsLadyPoet 27-Jul-05/5:23 AM Reply

Yeah your probably right. It was a stream of thought poem so if I changed it. It wouldn't be stream of thought. So I've got to keep it the same. If I did change it I'd probably drop "Satellite". The title by the way is a parody of some of the many seemingly nonsensical titles you may have seen attributed to other poems.

[8] Niphredil 11-Oct-05/11:29 AM Reply

I liked it. Not for any particular turn of phrase but for the soft dreamlike quality I felt it evoked. But I would get rid of the 'Satellite' bit, not everything has to stay a pure train of thought...