| Re: A limerick by smiffy84 |
17-Jun-05/11:43 PM |
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I think Joseph Smith was an idiot.
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| Re: word splatter by nentwined |
17-Jun-05/11:39 PM |
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| Re: a comment on word splatter by nentwined |
17-Jun-05/11:39 PM |
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I think because she is covered in puke.
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| Re: a comment on missing pieces by mystic enoch |
17-Jun-05/11:38 PM |
well. step 1. Use a thesaurus. Broken -- busted -- wrecked -- bent -- bruised -- mangled -- tortured -- trashed --...
but don't say.. "Its all broken. Now I must fix this broken thing." eww. yuck. and "it's all broken" is bad too. try.. "it's broken"..
"You have crushed it
now I must tend this
mangled vessel." --
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| Re: missing pieces by mystic enoch |
17-Jun-05/12:24 PM |
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not as good as the JOEY one.
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| Re: For the love of joey(revised) by mystic enoch |
17-Jun-05/12:23 PM |
"for the love of you" is just bad.
the genitive form of YOU is YOUR.
"for your love" is a song by a reggae band (King Konga) a Country Artist (Chris LeDoux), and a classic sixties rock song (yardbirds). I even think Stevie Wonder sang a song titled For your Love.
okay. bye.
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| Re: Love by untamed_fierce |
17-Jun-05/12:46 AM |
good start.. where are the other stanzas?
I'll vote when you're done.
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| Re: a comment on Sisyphus' wife by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk |
16-Jun-05/1:42 PM |
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bitches is the right word. More than one bitch in this brew. maybe bitches'?
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| Re: When the muse calls. by darby pyn |
16-Jun-05/11:58 AM |
inhibitions instead of inabitions.. because inabitions is not a word. a great word instead of inabitions would be inanitions.
inanitions means exhaustion, as from lack of nourishment or vitality. This would make the next line about starving flow.
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| Re: a comment on Eulogy for a Poet by Dovina |
16-Jun-05/11:52 AM |
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sorry.. just meant that I like those lines.
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| Re: a comment on Sisyphus' wife by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk |
16-Jun-05/11:49 AM |
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| Re: Eulogy for a Poet by Dovina |
16-Jun-05/11:24 AM |
Frost in his belly
fire in his heart
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| Re: I AM WHO I AM by blackthoughtz1 |
16-Jun-05/10:59 AM |
paradigm best explains you?
A pattern or model best explains you? huh.. strange. then you say you are outside of the box. cognitively dissonant. hmm.
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| Re: Don't be gay by wCUNTw |
16-Jun-05/10:54 AM |
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it rhymes, so it must be true.
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| Re: Between the Edges by woodstock20000 |
15-Jun-05/2:49 PM |
loving/hating -- wonderful/wrenching.
I tend to use this type of dissonance too much in what I write about love.
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| Re: a comment on it's tough at times by Jigg |
14-Jun-05/8:06 PM |
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I'll let you know if either happens for me.
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| Re: a comment on Panama by Dovina |
14-Jun-05/11:17 AM |
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that's the trouble.. what images come into my mind aren't always controlled by the poet.. maybe I'm just raunchy. dang.
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| Re: a comment on Youth Spent by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk |
14-Jun-05/11:07 AM |
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happily married and mushy. It's pretty sappy I admit.
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| Re: a comment on Unclean by Dovina |
14-Jun-05/11:06 AM |
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yes, I'm a med-alert bracelet wearing, helmeted, short-bus riding, window-licking, retard home living idiot.
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| Re: Sudden Change by Dovina |
14-Jun-05/1:00 AM |
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