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Sisyphus' wife

Member since 2005 · Posted 16 Jun 2005 · 7 comments

You made it clear that My ego is a donkey that is riding me with feelings contaminated with a tragic and swelling pride of vision dimming to the point I can't even see myself through the layers of ego billowing about me like pea soup fog in the Tule basin north of Fresno. and now You stand there wishing that I would color myself disappeared, yet I remain in front of you, gloriously wide and grinning the toothy grin of a man that is either nauseous or unconscious You dress yourself today in the victim's jewelry peeking through your fingers to see if I am tryingto guess which side of the bitches brew you are on.

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[5] deleted user 16-Jun-05/4:13 AM Reply

Shouldn't that be Sisyphus's Wife? If not, my 'Doris's off-day' needs a title revision...
This poem? Totally incomprehensive to me.

[n/a] Bankrupt_Word_Clerk › deleted user 16-Jun-05/11:49 AM Reply

http://www.grammarbook.com/punctuation/apostro.asp

Thank you good sir. It does require an additional s.

[7] Dovina 16-Jun-05/12:36 PM Reply

The first verse makes a clever point, but could do so in half the words. Lines 3-5 are almost repeats.

Verse 2 is good up to "tryingto" and "bitches (bitch's) brew"

[n/a] Bankrupt_Word_Clerk › Dovina 16-Jun-05/1:42 PM Reply

bitches is the right word. More than one bitch in this brew. maybe bitches'?

[n/a] zodiac › Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 18-Jun-05/2:05 AM Reply

In case you were wondering and couldn't be bothered to check Miles Davis called the famous recording sessions Bitches Brew without an apostrophe. I'd say bitches' brew if I were you.

[n/a] Bankrupt_Word_Clerk › zodiac 18-Jun-05/12:33 PM Reply

That is precisely where I got those words... Miles Davis.

[n/a] zodiac › Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 19-Jun-05/4:50 AM Reply

Yes. You still want the apostrophe after the s.