Re: a comment on "oh" by fevriere	23-Dec-04/11:45 AM
If it's a simple thing, like a duck eating bread, why complicate it?
Re: a comment on Math Poem by Dovina	23-Dec-04/11:43 AM
Again you have said opposites and then attempted to unite them. Alas, I accept bumness as your most current opinion of me. And as such I write bum poems. Where you get the idea that I think poetry is magical or ephemeral, escapes me. How well would a painter, or a truckdriver like INTRANSIT, or a sculptor like auscot, or a painter like van Gogh, write poetry. That, of course depends on two things - having the imagination needed to put a well understood profession into commonly understandable terms, and poetic ability. Are we clear now? This whole discussion seems insanely inane. I'm bored!
Re: a comment on "oh" by fevriere	23-Dec-04/11:21 AM
You must forgive DA, he's a Boolean Creation who doesn't like your poem because it's illogical. On second look, I think she gulped some seawater and said, "Oh." But if that's all there is, then I think it's too complicated for its message.
Re: Andrew part II by Spindle	22-Dec-04/5:23 PM
restrain->restraint "love's soothing touch AND scalding strike" good line. It did seem like killing myself the first time he did that. You're right, it's about virginity.
Re: Disable by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	22-Dec-04/5:14 PM
Retibution is only exceeded in sweetness by ridicule.
Re: Sidestepping Stupor by PsydewaysTears	22-Dec-04/10:51 AM
At least you're not assuming we know the setting this time. This is good. Verses 5,6 and 7 need some opening transition, I think.
Re: The Slave by Bhaskaryya	22-Dec-04/10:47 AM
Good. Line 2 - "And rest" Ling 3 - "descending."
Re: I have Learned to Let Go by Joe-joe	22-Dec-04/10:43 AM
So your goodbye was not final. We have two theories here on Poemranker: 1. Poets, who are dim, write nonsense. 2. Poets who are dim write nonsense. I see -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. adheres to both. Which do you prefer?
Re: a comment on Fugitively Speaking by Dovina	22-Dec-04/10:24 AM
Does this mean you will recant and read my poem now and comment on it rather than on how old I am and my general lifetime degree of success and/or failure?
Re: a comment on Math Poem by Dovina	22-Dec-04/10:18 AM
Pardon me, but are you speaking to me? Hey, these new red and green lines are very Christmasey, don't you think? Yes, I believe you are. Thank you for identifying me as a bum, and therefore having a bum idea of poetry. As such, I also make macaroni and cheese, and shall, if you request it, use that ability in the writing of a poem. Merry Christmas.
Re: a comment on Center Of The Universe by Dovina	21-Dec-04/5:39 PM
Thank you. It's the very part they all complained about.
Re: Horror at the grotto by scitz	21-Dec-04/4:14 PM
funny, sad
Re: Internet Inspiration (Dovina) revised by jroday	21-Dec-04/3:08 PM
Thank you for reposting this and for the kind sentiment.
Re: Twin Forks by auscot	21-Dec-04/3:07 PM
Your best so far. Quite good. no comma after bring. "No longer will I look, without regret," is a bit clunky.
Re: a comment on Magnetic Time by Dovina	21-Dec-04/1:46 PM
Thank you, too.
Re: a comment on Magnetic Time by Dovina	21-Dec-04/1:45 PM
Thank you, Fraser.
Re: Forgotten Strokes by Beyond_Dreams	21-Dec-04/1:44 PM
A bit over the top. A blank canvas sits untouched because it's blank; unveiled, but we see it. Tears overflowing from what? Palette decorated nightmarish dreams, and starlit eyes - outside then. Still a haunting vision.
Re: a comment on Math Poem by Dovina	21-Dec-04/11:59 AM
Math 10, Poetry 8
Re: "oh" by fevriere	21-Dec-04/10:34 AM
It fits the meter, but what does it mean?
Re: Mallard by richa	21-Dec-04/10:32 AM
The first sentence is good, except what have you against capitals? Chimera seems too grandiose for a duck's beak. "can try" meaning to try patience or ability, I suppose, seems clumsy. "ear of bread" may be a Briticism. If so, okay.