Re: a comment on Decline and Fall by auscot	20-Dec-04/7:05 PM
There's a little red x that you must never touch unless you're really grossed out by a comment. Once you touch the devil x, there is no retreat.
Re: a comment on Math Poem by Dovina	20-Dec-04/6:20 PM
You are a sculptor. van Gogh was a painter. I do a little math. How do you as a sculptor write poetry? That's the thing I want to get at. How does a car mechanic or truck driver put a thing so very common, that they do every day, into poetry.
Re: The Drop by auscot	20-Dec-04/6:16 PM
Colds are bad for prose drips fall from a runny nose though the form is good I think you should make that last line a thing to expose
Re: a comment on Decline and Fall by auscot	20-Dec-04/6:09 PM
I wish I could remember what I said. You seem to have deleted all the comments. Oh yes, I said this was atypical for zoo keepers. No, I did not get the metaphor. And on reading it again, I don't get it except that you said so. In the future, please do not delete comments unless they really gross you out.
Re: a comment on Interstellar Hell by PsydewaysTears	20-Dec-04/3:55 PM
Looking at it that way, and reading it again, it makes more sense. But unless the poem is part of a series where readers already know some things about you, you cannot expect us to pick that up from this poem alone.
Re: a comment on Math Poem by Dovina	20-Dec-04/1:50 PM
Is that why you voted 10?
Re: a comment on Math Poem by Dovina	20-Dec-04/1:26 PM
Back to that, are we? Same question, new setting. You made no secret, in your opening statement on jroday’s poem, that you find my vote of 9, compared to your 10, “very sad.” Your ensuing questions sought to draw me into some slip-of-word, a self-made entanglement from which you could close in to inflict pain for your pleasure in accordance with your previously stated intent. You will understand if I am wary. “A smart fish swims around the bait,” and I have answered your question (in the deleted poem, and rephrased here) as fully and directly as it deserves, considering your stated motive. Today, I have a red dress to put on, a hat to wear, and cheer to deliver. May I begin by presenting you the enjoyment of a title for your possible development? “Dovina, the Dimtard.” Catchy, isn’t it? Has a pleasant ring. Using it and my “Yes” answer to your question in jroady’s poem about whether I find his poem nearly as good as Yeats, you could expound for several pages, and enjoy the merriment of this special season. Again, Merry Christmas.
Re: Interstellar Hell by PsydewaysTears	20-Dec-04/12:17 PM
A weak idea, weakly developed. This is not your best. The rhymes do not help. As much as I've criticized your vagueness, I'd rather have it over this.
Re: If I knew by Rabbit	20-Dec-04/12:13 PM
Some of the verbs seem wrongly tensed. Verse 4, for example, try "I would kiss you" Line 6 has a problem.
Re: Religious Slaughter by Beyond_Dreams	20-Dec-04/12:02 PM
Reminds of TS Eliot "The Wasteland." Lots of mythology and language to dissect. I get maybe half of it, and that in fragments.
Re: a comment on Math Poem by Dovina	20-Dec-04/11:39 AM
No, its not like that. I don't have this all formulated. Its just that metaphor (asignment) might work in a math setting, granted the numbers need more relationship to love, hate, etc, than I have shown. I don't think that makes the whole concept impossible or weird.
Re: a comment on Math Poem by Dovina	20-Dec-04/11:34 AM
Why not? Isn't poetry about metaphor - asignment
Re: a comment on Math Poem by Dovina	20-Dec-04/11:30 AM
Worried about copyright - I doubt it.
Re: a comment on Math Poem by Dovina	20-Dec-04/11:29 AM
Oh, maybe the end of a love affair (2-2) then the end of a life (1-1)
Re: a comment on Math Poem by Dovina	20-Dec-04/11:23 AM
This is not a good math poem, but I imagine the possibility of a good one. I like the idea of expressing with math some of the same fears, loves and hates that van Gogh painted.
Re: a comment on Math Poem by Dovina	20-Dec-04/11:12 AM
Yes, and why do I suspect my answer will lead to another question, which will lead to something worse. I see jroday deleted his poem on which we were in the midst of a similar development. And Merry Christmas.
Re: a comment on Math Poem by Dovina	20-Dec-04/10:36 AM
Have I offended your sensibilities in burbling about a sum? I think it goes back to a prior discussion regarding science in poetry. At least you say the idea of a math poem is okay this time. And what’s this about converse, unless you mean Dictionary Lesson? Wow, what a jumble of stuff to answer. Makes me lazy just trying. Maybe writing a math poem is like a painter writing one with only the tools he knows how to use.
Re: Grandma's Prayer/Lord Reply by jroday	20-Dec-04/10:23 AM
Why did you delete your recent poem. I hope you did not change your mind because of something I said.
Re: a comment on Death by Liquid by PsydewaysTears	19-Dec-04/3:51 PM
I prefer a little more direction and singlness of purpose in the poems I read. I also write double-tongued sometimes, but from a poem like this, I go away with a few good tidbits and a lot of wonderment.
Re: Death by Liquid by PsydewaysTears	19-Dec-04/11:55 AM
I had trouble separating the three characters. Aparently, your friend is sipping the drink of "her." Maybe he's an alcoholic drinking her booz, or in love with her. He feeds off your emotions, which I don't get. Aparently you are about to commit suicied by drowning. Or have I got it all wrong?