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Religious Slaughter

by Beyond_Dreams

Member since 2004 · Posted 20 Dec 2004 · 17 comments

An apostle of literature sleeps eyes closed; dreaming of water ways with a splash of crimson delight. His eyes flutter; awakened to falling Abremon, A tumulus ocean branches out grasping the searing rays; ode to the sun. Silver riches shine beneath the seas of parallel complexes; a skull sits bastardized, fallen from the heat. But it's not the skull of the trying hand reaching towards a goal. Fallen from grace with scorched wings; abandoned by the ocean breeze. Servants slaughter sheep to the howling of the moon strips of wool starlings moving as they fall. Beneath the iridescent river skies. The air is full and heavy. Icarus would be proud. A star lit sparkled sky outlined in feathers and wax; one for religion dies. Prayers of Agnostic combated Christian scrap yard metal wreckages; tapping on the window to the soul, the religious caucus pendulum swaying to and fro...

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[8] Dovina 20-Dec-04/12:02 PM Reply
Reminds of TS Eliot "The Wasteland." Lots of mythology and language to dissect. I get maybe half of it, and that in fragments.
[n/a] Beyond_Dreams › Dovina 20-Dec-04/4:41 PM Reply
It's sad that the events in history, where so many people died was about the religious crusades and even sadder is the fact that it is about to happen again, and the thoughts behind it came to mind as I watch the news daily.

I hope that gave you little insight on this poem.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Beyond_Dreams 20-Dec-04/5:22 PM Reply
Are you referring to Iraq, and Bush's bum-crushingly idiotic description of its liberation as "a crusade"? It may be an irony, but if we are successful in Iraq it will be as much a victory for secularism as anything else, just as deposing the Taliban was a victory for secularism in Afghanistan.
[n/a] Beyond_Dreams › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 20-Dec-04/6:24 PM Reply
It's not so much Iraq specifically but Iraq is a good example. It's more of a general outlook on the world right now and state of it.
[n/a] zodiac › Beyond_Dreams 22-Dec-04/5:35 AM Reply
I'd like you to consider the following tidbit: My wife currently works in the Islam village of Ghowar, which, as it happens, is built on the Biblical towns of Sodom and Gomorrah. ONE OUT OF EVERY FOUR children there has a major mental disability, caused by massive inbreeding, crushing poverty, and the continuing wrath of Christ Our God a MILLION YEARS after the fact.
[n/a] zodiac › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 22-Dec-04/5:31 AM Reply
I disagree. Secularism will be victorious, but only because secularism's SO FUCKING COOL. Take, for example, the internet cafe I'm sitting in now, where ten out of ten Islams are currently viewing different kinds of American hardcore porn. The appearance of an Arab-Western culture war (which is really big here, incidentally, despite porn-viewing) is bound to lead to some reactionary fundamentalism.

In fact, it apparently already is. Twenty years ago, something like a tenth of the Muslim women in Jordan covered their heads. Today it's nine-tenths. Even given that part of that is the result of Jordanians returning from the Gulf after the first Gulf War, that's still a pretty big shift to the right. I figure it'll be followed by an even bigger slide to the left within a few years, provided the Middle East isn't simply swallowed by the earth for its colossal dimness, like it should be. I mean, Western Culture FUCKING RULES, am I right??!? IT'S A FUCKING STEAMROLLER, MAN!!!!
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › zodiac 22-Dec-04/10:34 AM Reply
Whom, and what, do you disagree with?
[n/a] zodiac › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 22-Dec-04/10:08 PM Reply
I thought I was disagreeing with "if we are successful in Iraq it will be as much a victory for secularism as anything else". Now I'm not so sure :-(
[n/a] tadpole › Beyond_Dreams 13-Mar-05/1:16 PM Reply
What would you die for?. . .
This war in Iraq is nothing like the crusades.
[5] auscot 20-Dec-04/6:21 PM Reply
I will never take to free verse, must be my age, give me a good old fashioned rhyming poem any day. Yet, never too late, must try. One thing I would like to see, a 'tumulous' ocean with an 'o'.
[n/a] Beyond_Dreams › auscot 20-Dec-04/6:28 PM Reply
Are you referring to the spelling?
[5] auscot › Beyond_Dreams 21-Dec-04/2:37 AM Reply
Yes.
[n/a] Beyond_Dreams › auscot 21-Dec-04/10:51 AM Reply
'tumulus' is spelled correctly
[5] auscot › Beyond_Dreams 21-Dec-04/3:09 PM Reply
Sorry, thought you were using it as an adjective.
[8] PsydewaysTears 20-Dec-04/10:29 PM Reply
Overall an intereting take on what so many have such a powerful position of opinion in. I liked the second and third stanzas best, but don't think I'd try and change anything about the others. The imagery is too strong to risk altering in even the slightest way.

•°•Gregory James•°•
[n/a] Beyond_Dreams › PsydewaysTears 20-Dec-04/10:52 PM Reply
Thank you :)
[8] dancin_n_da_moonlite 3-Jan-05/9:28 AM Reply
i like this . . . u creat vivid images