Help | About | Suggestions | Alms | Chat [0] | Users [0] | Log In | Join
 Search:
Poem: Submit | Random | Best | Worst | Recent | Comments   

Forgotten Strokes (Free verse) by Beyond_Dreams
A canvas sits untouched, unveiled lonely and forgotten, memories fade. Careless strokes of grey wispy thoughts palette decorated nightmarish dreams; requiem conceived glowing through the tainted pasty lacerated sheet. Visions of evening dining, star lit sparkled eyes, manifested demons trying unworldly times. Tears over flowing, a puddle now forms the evening candles are lit, but no one’s there to show.

Up the ladder: The Mirror
Down the ladder: The Ship

You must be logged in to leave comments. Vote:

Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
 GraphVotes
10  .. 00
.. 00
.. 00
.. 10
.. 00
.. 00
.. 00
.. 00
.. 00
.. 00
.. 10

Arithmetic Mean: 3.5
Weighted score: 4.928861
Overall Rank: 9288
Posted: December 21, 2004 11:43 AM PST; Last modified: December 21, 2004 1:48 PM PST
View voting details
Comments:
[7] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 | 21-Dec-04/1:44 PM | Reply
A bit over the top. A blank canvas sits untouched because it's blank; unveiled, but we see it. Tears overflowing from what? Palette decorated nightmarish dreams, and starlit eyes - outside then. Still a haunting vision.
[n/a] Beyond_Dreams @ 208.20.95.126 > Dovina | 21-Dec-04/1:52 PM | Reply
I had to edit it about the blank canvas part. Other wise you have to look past the "canvas" part of the poem. It's about a person depressed trying to fit in "palette decorated" her makeup "nightmarish dreams" gothic
Her memories are of before with the evening dining and star lit sparkled eyes. That describes her old memories of joy. Manifested demons trying unworldly times.....nothing is going right. Her tears over flowing into the puddle she’s all alone.....
162 view(s)




Track and Plan your submissions ; Read some Comics ; Get Paid for your Poetry
PoemRanker Copyright © 2001 - 2024 - kaolin fire - All Rights Reserved
All poems Copyright © their respective authors
An internet tradition since June 9, 2001