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Story remains the same (Free verse) by annadoc
Though the language varies, our stories are the same we all possess emotions, devotions our laughs, our cries, our loves, our lies; grandness of life itself we express differently the language varies though our stories remain the same the sum of all our parts that which lies within our hearts

Up the ladder: Life (the circle)
Down the ladder: The Waiting Room

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.5
Weighted score: 4.928861
Overall Rank: 9172
Posted: April 18, 2006 2:19 PM PDT; Last modified: April 18, 2006 2:19 PM PDT
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[7] Ranger @ 86.131.51.218 | 18-Apr-06/3:07 PM | Reply
Nice ideas. I think it deserves to be longer, simply because it rests on cliched lines (stories remaining the same, sum of all parts etc.) which isn't necessarily a bad thing, but in its current form it's just a collection of lines which have been said many times before. Yet I can tell there's more intricate thought behind this. Give some feedback to other users' poetry and hopefully they'll reciprocate and give you some useful inspiration.
[n/a] annadoc @ 161.7.2.160 > Ranger | 19-Apr-06/2:16 PM | Reply
thank you for the thoughts...what I truly need to improve ... and I've been reading others and have to compose my thoughts on those and give my feed back... and I feel I can get some useful inspiration --

I also thought this was a cliche (myself).
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