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Story remains the same (Free verse) by annadoc

Though the language varies, our stories are the same we all possess emotions, devotions our laughs, our cries, our loves, our lies; grandness of life itself we express differently the language varies though our stories remain the same the sum of all our parts that which lies within our hearts

Ranger 18-Apr-06/3:07 PM
Nice ideas. I think it deserves to be longer, simply because it rests on cliched lines (stories remaining the same, sum of all parts etc.) which isn't necessarily a bad thing, but in its current form it's just a collection of lines which have been said many times before. Yet I can tell there's more intricate thought behind this. Give some feedback to other users' poetry and hopefully they'll reciprocate and give you some useful inspiration.




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