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Magnetic Time

Member since 2004 · Posted 21 Dec 2004 · 5 comments

Time is a curious magnet, attaching itself like a leech, adding wordiness to sentences, hope to fated lives, and eternity to thoughts. “Available in two weeks time,” he said, when eliminating “time” would obviate an apostrophe’s place and still leave him available in two weeks. It was sincere ignorance and caused no harm, but let’s resurrect a flagrant case. “Available for all time,” he said, because he’d heard it and thought it meant something and wanted me to know it. It was conscientious stupidity, but caused no harm, so let’s resurrect a hopeless case. “Not available,” he said, “Not now, not ever.” It was the end of eternity, the beginning of now, and a motto for time in the next twenty-four hours that began five years ago.

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[10] deleted user 21-Dec-04/11:16 AM Reply
Ace
[n/a] Dovina › deleted user 21-Dec-04/1:45 PM Reply
Thank you, Fraser.
[10] blacksoul 21-Dec-04/1:03 PM Reply
That is so lovely.-10-
[n/a] Dovina › blacksoul 21-Dec-04/1:46 PM Reply
Thank you, too.
[10] jroday 21-Dec-04/2:02 PM Reply
Dovina I posted the poem he worte for you. this poem is wonderful that you wrote for him. the only thing is that he had a seizure today, and went into a coma. I will e-mail you. Felicia