You must forgive DA, he's a Boolean Creation who doesn't like your poem because it's illogical.
On second look, I think she gulped some seawater and said, "Oh." But if that's all there is, then I think it's too complicated for its message.
The last of you to get run off of poemranker was run off for amock Booleanism. If I were you, I'd stop using some word I heard somewhere and thought it was cool (and who doesn't think 'Boolean' sounds cool?) until I figured out what it's all about. And it seems pretty unlikely you'll be able to manage that any time before the 28th century. Anyway, you've been warned.
I'm not sure. "under" seemed to be a word of hiding the actual physical expression of emotion, the tear itself.. The tear appears to be represented by the round letter of 'o'.
This is very helpful to me, going through the poem at word level. I am usually too lazy to give a poem integrity but I will never write well until I consider what words I mean to use in every every instance and why. So thankyou. :)
Actually, I really like that. "A syllable aches". I'm not sure about how the sea got in there. Bit subconscious. Maybe aligning the sea with femininity, girls' emotions?.. Not the foggiest. (Was that a sea allusion, slightly?)
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On second look, I think she gulped some seawater and said, "Oh." But if that's all there is, then I think it's too complicated for its message.
Wow, that's almost as Boolean as DA's comment, and a twist of what I said. Illigical poems can be either dim or bright, as can logical poems.
This is very helpful to me, going through the poem at word level. I am usually too lazy to give a poem integrity but I will never write well until I consider what words I mean to use in every every instance and why. So thankyou. :)
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