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"oh" (Haiku) by fevriere

Under her breathswell, a half-gram of saltwater, a syllable's ache.

fevriere 25-Dec-04/10:17 AM
Actually, I really like that. "A syllable aches". I'm not sure about how the sea got in there. Bit subconscious. Maybe aligning the sea with femininity, girls' emotions?.. Not the foggiest. (Was that a sea allusion, slightly?)




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