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"oh" (Haiku) by fevriere

Under her breathswell, a half-gram of saltwater, a syllable's ache.

Dovina 23-Dec-04/11:21 AM
You must forgive DA, he's a Boolean Creation who doesn't like your poem because it's illogical.
On second look, I think she gulped some seawater and said, "Oh." But if that's all there is, then I think it's too complicated for its message.




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