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"oh" (Haiku) by fevriere

Under her breathswell, a half-gram of saltwater, a syllable's ache.

fevriere 26-Dec-04/7:26 AM
I'm not sure. "under" seemed to be a word of hiding the actual physical expression of emotion, the tear itself.. The tear appears to be represented by the round letter of 'o'.
This is very helpful to me, going through the poem at word level. I am usually too lazy to give a poem integrity but I will never write well until I consider what words I mean to use in every every instance and why. So thankyou. :)




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