| Re: 'Till Then by sliver |
27-Jul-06/8:13 AM |
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| Re: Why Me by blacksoul |
19-Dec-04/6:32 PM |
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I'm sorry about your dad.. You hold on and be strong for your father will need that kind of strength from his family.
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| Re: Free by TLRufener |
20-Oct-04/7:34 PM |
I like.
I think the first line from the second stanza should be 'your'.. And the bit about 'Everyone knew that I was wrong'.. Well, shouldn't it be 'thought'? That's just what I think.. Don't change if you think you're right.. k..
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| Re: Youth by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
20-Oct-04/7:26 PM |
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Don't change anything.. I think it's already good.
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| Re: Bracelets In A Box by cuddlytiger17 |
12-Oct-04/6:08 AM |
I don't know what was wrong with Sasha and DA.
Whatever it is, just keep on writing.. based on your feelings or not. You can't please everybody but obviously, this one does it for me. (",)
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| Re: A Reflective Window by lukehanney |
10-Oct-04/3:18 AM |
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For one long poem.. This is bloody good.
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| Re: a comment on Call of the Moon by arduinn |
10-Oct-04/3:14 AM |
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Oops.. My bad. Thank you for pointing it out..
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| Re: I'll Take You In My Arms by ilovecars131 |
7-Oct-04/3:07 AM |
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This is very nice.. Don't change anything.
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| Re: Amputee by INTRANSIT |
5-Oct-04/6:33 AM |
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Honestly, when I first skim through this.. I couldn't quite decipher what you are trying to say... but after reading it a couple of times.. it makes sense. bloody good.
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| Re: Grandpa's boat by Caducus |
19-Sep-04/5:08 AM |
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Good.. Struck a chord in me..
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| Re: a comment on Lost by arduinn |
14-Sep-04/6:49 AM |
ahh.. great... thanks
do continue writing great pieces k..!
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| Re: a comment on Lost by arduinn |
11-Sep-04/6:37 AM |
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hmm.. are there really two? well, what can I say.. I like your style...
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| Re: Into My World by sliver |
7-Sep-04/10:55 PM |
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I especially like the last verse.. Good work here..
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| Re: a comment on Flower of Lebanon by donmiguel1960 |
15-Aug-04/3:55 AM |
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| Re: Innocence by QuirkyWonder |
3-Aug-04/3:50 AM |
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you know how to play with your words here...
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| Re: Love Slain by Mus Vai |
5-Jul-04/4:55 AM |
don't really feel the words.. but the way you write is good. keep writing.
I'm not sure why you used 'he' in stanza two when all throughout you used 'i'. (?)
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| Re: Love Redefined by Mus Vai |
5-Jul-04/4:45 AM |
well described.. some of the words are used too many times, though.. that kind of marred the poem
in L14, i suggest you change 'striketh my hand' to sth else as 'strike' means 'hit'...
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| Re: a comment on Black Rose by arduinn |
2-Jul-04/7:59 AM |
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| Re: Girlz by liljsmith87 |
27-Jun-04/6:50 AM |
a number of grammatical errors and spelling mistakes..
maybe after you edit this and write something better.. i might just change my mind about my vote
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| Re: Flower of Lebanon by donmiguel1960 |
27-Jun-04/6:39 AM |
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conjured a pretty picture when i read it..
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