poemranker ::20 most recent comments by arduinn and replies

Comments byarduinn, the 20 most recent, including replies. Only comments on poems

on 'Till Then by sliver 27 Jul 2006, 8:13 AM
wow..
on Why Me by blacksoul 19 Dec 2004, 6:32 PM
I'm sorry about your dad.. You hold on and be strong for your father will need that kind of strength from his family.
on Free by TLRufener 20 Oct 2004, 7:34 PM
I like.

I think the first line from the second stanza should be 'your'.. And the bit about 'Everyone knew that I was wrong'.. Well, shouldn't it be 'thought'? That's just what I think.. Don't change if you think you're right.. k..
on Youth by thepinkbunnyofdoom 20 Oct 2004, 7:26 PM
Don't change anything.. I think it's already good.
on Bracelets In A Box by cuddlytiger17 12 Oct 2004, 6:08 AM
I don't know what was wrong with Sasha and DA.
Whatever it is, just keep on writing.. based on your feelings or not. You can't please everybody but obviously, this one does it for me. (",)
on A Reflective Window by lukehanney 10 Oct 2004, 3:18 AM
For one long poem.. This is bloody good.
replying on Call of the Moon by arduinn 10 Oct 2004, 3:14 AM
Oops.. My bad. Thank you for pointing it out..
on I'll Take You In My Arms by ilovecars131 7 Oct 2004, 3:07 AM
This is very nice.. Don't change anything.
on Amputee by INTRANSIT 5 Oct 2004, 6:33 AM
Honestly, when I first skim through this.. I couldn't quite decipher what you are trying to say... but after reading it a couple of times.. it makes sense. bloody good.
on Grandpa's boat by Caducus 19 Sep 2004, 5:08 AM
Good.. Struck a chord in me..
replying on Lost by arduinn 14 Sep 2004, 6:49 AM
ahh.. great... thanks
do continue writing great pieces k..!
replying on Lost by arduinn 11 Sep 2004, 6:37 AM
hmm.. are there really two? well, what can I say.. I like your style...
on Into My World by sliver 7 Sep 2004, 10:55 PM
I especially like the last verse.. Good work here..
replying on Flower of Lebanon by donmiguel1960 15 Aug 2004, 3:55 AM
most welcome..
on Innocence by QuirkyWonder 3 Aug 2004, 3:50 AM
you know how to play with your words here...
on Love Slain by Mus Vai 5 Jul 2004, 4:55 AM
don't really feel the words.. but the way you write is good. keep writing.

I'm not sure why you used 'he' in stanza two when all throughout you used 'i'. (?)
on Love Redefined by Mus Vai 5 Jul 2004, 4:45 AM
well described.. some of the words are used too many times, though.. that kind of marred the poem

in L14, i suggest you change 'striketh my hand' to sth else as 'strike' means 'hit'...
replying on Black Rose by arduinn 2 Jul 2004, 7:59 AM
'lost' huh?
thanx..
on Girlz by liljsmith87 27 Jun 2004, 6:50 AM
a number of grammatical errors and spelling mistakes..
maybe after you edit this and write something better.. i might just change my mind about my vote
on Flower of Lebanon by donmiguel1960 27 Jun 2004, 6:39 AM
conjured a pretty picture when i read it..