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Why Me (Free verse) by blacksoul
Intensive care, tubes running from here to there.I'm in shock just standing there, my heart is as empty as my pockets, hollowed out like a locket. Today I felt like crying the nurse said my father might be dying. wandering around within a maze of subconscious chambers, I felt lost. Just for a moment, a day, and all of the night. I salute you for the way you fight. you are one of the reasons for my existence.I am his son that could do no wrong. he is my everything, so big and strong. I've often wondered and even asked the dear lord the big question WHY! why is you trying to take my father away? I had a thought! giving me peace of mine and tranquility. DECICATED TO JRODAY (MY FATHER)

Up the ladder: your wife's pain
Down the ladder: Time Imperfect

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.3333335
Weighted score: 5.62753
Overall Rank: 2197
Posted: November 18, 2004 11:51 AM PST; Last modified: November 18, 2004 11:51 AM PST
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Comments:
[8] Dovina @ 209.77.30.198 | 18-Nov-04/1:33 PM | Reply
You need to look at spelling and grammar.
Is jroday really your father, and is he really dying? Tell him I hope he's not dying.
[n/a] blacksoul @ 204.215.33.140 > Dovina | 18-Nov-04/2:11 PM | Reply
Yes Dovina jroday is really my father,Iam sorry about the spelling and grammar, but I was in a hurry to get to the hospital today.As for him dying the doctor said yesterday It don't look good being this is the second surgery for the same
thing,but he's a strong man, and a fighter. He talk to me about you before he had surgery. so I know you know what's going on.
He's in almost like a coma state right , but I will keep you informed. THANK YOU FOR YOUR COMMENT MAY GOD BLESS YOU AND YOUR FAMILY.
[8] Dovina @ 17.255.240.162 > blacksoul | 19-Nov-04/11:28 AM | Reply
Tell him to hold on, and damn the estupidos. I hope he recovers.
[8] arduinn @ 165.21.83.230 | 19-Dec-04/6:32 PM | Reply
I'm sorry about your dad.. You hold on and be strong for your father will need that kind of strength from his family.
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