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Why Me (Free verse) by blacksoul

Intensive care, tubes running from here to there.I'm in shock just standing there, my heart is as empty as my pockets, hollowed out like a locket. Today I felt like crying the nurse said my father might be dying. wandering around within a maze of subconscious chambers, I felt lost. Just for a moment, a day, and all of the night. I salute you for the way you fight. you are one of the reasons for my existence.I am his son that could do no wrong. he is my everything, so big and strong. I've often wondered and even asked the dear lord the big question WHY! why is you trying to take my father away? I had a thought! giving me peace of mine and tranquility. DECICATED TO JRODAY (MY FATHER)

Dovina 18-Nov-04/1:33 PM
You need to look at spelling and grammar.
Is jroday really your father, and is he really dying? Tell him I hope he's not dying.




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