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Black Rose (Free verse) by arduinn
A single rose you presented to me, So deep and dark black seemed likely; Oblivious to the sign fate had sent me, With a smile, I accepted it gladly. Not free of thorns, thus it pricked me, Stealing blood to sign my destiny; "Now you are mine, one and only," Through my mind you spoke softly. Captivated a look, charmed with you, Breathlessly I replied, "So mote it be." But never again will I give my heart away as readily, Only to be treated so carelessly, Never again will I trust as blindly, Simply to be betrayed and left empty. I gave my heart but for love fallacy, I sold my soul for promised immortality; What use is it now without you here with me, Trapped in this web I weaved, Without entity, forever, for eternity....

Up the ladder: Pinjur
Down the ladder: Damage

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 6.9640274
Overall Rank: 134
Posted: June 4, 2004 6:53 AM PDT; Last modified: June 4, 2004 6:53 AM PDT
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[10] zodiac @ 65.161.41.48 | 4-Jun-04/7:12 AM | Reply
In response to this poem, I would suggest you become a gay. Homos don't have to deal with all the crap in relationships that we normals do, since they've had to work so hard just to get Official Bummer status, and aren't likely to screw it all up over something so silly as who forgot to take out the trash. Think about it.

Oh, and ace 'EE' rhymes!
[n/a] arduinn @ 165.21.83.247 > zodiac | 25-Jun-04/8:40 AM | Reply
No, thank you... I'm happy with the way I am...

Thanks for the comment and 10 nonetheless..
[10] titan69 @ 62.31.24.160 | 4-Jun-04/12:39 PM | Reply
this is just so good 10/10
[9] DR Limerick @ 62.31.24.160 | 4-Jun-04/12:52 PM | Reply
very good have you looked at titan69s wolf rose?
[n/a] arduinn @ 165.21.83.230 > DR Limerick | 4-Jun-04/6:51 PM | Reply
just did.. i like it a lot.. thanx!
[0] god'swife @ 209.178.165.179 | 4-Jun-04/3:44 PM | Reply
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH AAAAHHH! AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH.

Ok I feel better now.
[n/a] arduinn @ 165.21.83.246 > god'swife | 12-Jun-04/7:58 PM | Reply
that doesn't tell me why you don't like it...
[10] electroman1979 @ 198.81.26.16 | 26-Jun-04/1:16 AM | Reply
great poem, keep up the good work
[10] | Broken | @ 202.156.2.82 | 26-Jun-04/10:40 PM | Reply
Considering the fact that you got the inspiration
of writing this piece from 'In the Forest Of The Night'.. I admire that .. I like it a lot and thanks
for writing it in my book ... Heheh. (",@)
[n/a] arduinn @ 165.21.83.240 > | Broken | | 27-Jun-04/6:22 AM | Reply
hey.. thanx dudette..
[8] Mus Vai @ 165.21.154.12 | 2-Jul-04/7:53 AM | Reply
Yeh this one's cool too. Think I like the first one the best.
[n/a] arduinn @ 165.21.83.247 > Mus Vai | 2-Jul-04/7:59 AM | Reply
'lost' huh?
thanx..
[9] Prince of Void @ 217.218.131.135 | 13-Jul-04/2:11 PM | Reply
i love black rose
[0] Edna Sweetlove @ 85.210.14.5 | 22-Feb-13/9:49 AM | Reply
Fucking awful.
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