| Re: Love Slain by Mus Vai |
5-Jul-04/4:55 AM |
don't really feel the words.. but the way you write is good. keep writing.
I'm not sure why you used 'he' in stanza two when all throughout you used 'i'. (?)
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3-Aug-04/3:19 AM |
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i have a penchant for mythology... so, this one got in my good book... not to mention, it was smoothly done... as most of your other works...
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| Re: Innocence by QuirkyWonder |
3-Aug-04/3:50 AM |
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you know how to play with your words here...
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15-Aug-04/3:41 AM |
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All the words seem to fall into their places nicely.. -9-
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24-Aug-04/12:35 AM |
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well done.. i like the meaning of it, too.
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27-Aug-04/6:19 PM |
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you rendered me speechless...
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| Re: Into My World by sliver |
7-Sep-04/10:55 PM |
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I especially like the last verse.. Good work here..
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19-Sep-04/4:50 AM |
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Absolutely beautiful.. Good job on the rhyming, too... Keep on writing ok..
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| Re: Grandpa's boat by Caducus |
19-Sep-04/5:08 AM |
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Good.. Struck a chord in me..
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2-Oct-04/7:51 AM |
i like your style and depth. i mean.. your poems are beautiful and yet, still straight to the point.. keep it up..
p/s ever tried taking part in poetry competitions or getting your work published? i just think that efforts such as this should be immortalised in books.. (",)
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| Re: Amputee by INTRANSIT |
5-Oct-04/6:33 AM |
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Honestly, when I first skim through this.. I couldn't quite decipher what you are trying to say... but after reading it a couple of times.. it makes sense. bloody good.
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| Re: I'll Take You In My Arms by ilovecars131 |
7-Oct-04/3:07 AM |
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This is very nice.. Don't change anything.
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7-Oct-04/3:11 AM |
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This poem is not THAT bad, really...
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| Re: A Reflective Window by lukehanney |
10-Oct-04/3:18 AM |
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For one long poem.. This is bloody good.
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| Re: Bracelets In A Box by cuddlytiger17 |
12-Oct-04/6:08 AM |
I don't know what was wrong with Sasha and DA.
Whatever it is, just keep on writing.. based on your feelings or not. You can't please everybody but obviously, this one does it for me. (",)
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| Re: Youth by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
20-Oct-04/7:26 PM |
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Don't change anything.. I think it's already good.
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| Re: Free by TLRufener |
20-Oct-04/7:34 PM |
I like.
I think the first line from the second stanza should be 'your'.. And the bit about 'Everyone knew that I was wrong'.. Well, shouldn't it be 'thought'? That's just what I think.. Don't change if you think you're right.. k..
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17-Nov-04/6:15 PM |
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neat.. but don't quite like the picture of the girl formed in my mind. she sounded so.. helpless. was that what you were trying to convey? i mean.. she couldn't live without the guy kinda thing?
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| Re: Why Me by blacksoul |
19-Dec-04/6:32 PM |
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I'm sorry about your dad.. You hold on and be strong for your father will need that kind of strength from his family.
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| Re: 'Till Then by sliver |
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