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Lost (Free verse) by arduinn Whatever has happened to us?
No more love, faith or trust
I dream of the times we spent
When I was young
Then, you were around
When I cried
My tears you wiped
When I was lonely
You played with me
It was over all too soon
Now my life is in ruin
Bitter memories in abandon
Precious moments were just borrowed heaven
Often I sat alone and wondered
Questions I have are left unanswered
What did he had that Dad didn't?
Was it impossible for him to learn?
Why wasn't I enough
To hold the family together?
What about my sisters and brother?
Come on Mom, I was only three
Was it that easy
To just give up on the family?
From them you took me away
Leaving everything in disarray
But you were always so busy
You never had time for me
So now I have no other choice but to leave
I'm sorry Mom but this is how it has to be
Up the ladder:
Soap Star Stud Haikus
Down the ladder:
A Girlâs Climax
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 7.133333
Posted: June 12, 2004 8:34 AM PDT; Last modified: June 12, 2004 7:44 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.8790336 Overall Rank: 268 Comments:
What language is spoken in Singapore? Is it Malay?
English is the language widely spoken here but Malay is my native language... If you don't mind me asking, why did you ask?
How did you know about this Malay language anyway?
oh and thanx for the ten
Reads quite nicely. The conflict at the end is far too cliched though, needs some kind of insight or... something.
Pass me the boiled water and funnel.
A substancial as a miracle whip and cheez-whiz sandwich, and just as tasty.
I find that you are hard to satisfy but it's a good thing.. Thanx for finding the time to comment...
teenage angst
I like this i can picture what you are saying 9/10
glad tt i got the msg across.. thanx
You write poems that sound like Yoda, or I should say, like Yoda sounds, poems you write.
hahaha.. i do enjoy watching Star Wars..
good poem, -9-
You're such a fat cock. Is this your idea of "constructive criticism"? It's exactly the same as saying "shit poeme, -0-", except instead of telling the truth it inflates them with an absurdly misguided sense of whooshing pride. Perhaps you're thinking of writing some buncombe along the lines of "well I think its important to encourage people to write poetry, just because you dont like something doesnt mean it isnt good". Well don't.
It's good .. thumbs up! ... You managed to make others
feel your emotions and you explained the poem well.
Yeh this one's real. I like it.
very good ..
Well, it appears that two of my poems have made their way to Arduinn's favorites list. To what do I owe this fine pleasure? thank you for the compliment!
hmm.. are there really two? well, what can I say.. I like your style...
Yea? and I like yers. BTW, I am also NoSage, It's my name, jason, pronounced backwards. c ya
ahh.. great... thanks
do continue writing great pieces k..! 313 view(s)
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"Often I sit alone and wondered"
"What does he has that Dad didn't?"
stuff like that.