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Lost

Member since 2004 · Posted 12 Jun 2004 · Edited 12 Jun 2004 · 23 comments

Whatever has happened to us? No more love, faith or trust I dream of the times we spent When I was young Then, you were around When I cried My tears you wiped When I was lonely You played with me It was over all too soon Now my life is in ruin Bitter memories in abandon Precious moments were just borrowed heaven Often I sat alone and wondered Questions I have are left unanswered What did he had that Dad didn't? Was it impossible for him to learn? Why wasn't I enough To hold the family together? What about my sisters and brother? Come on Mom, I was only three Was it that easy To just give up on the family? From them you took me away Leaving everything in disarray But you were always so busy You never had time for me So now I have no other choice but to leave I'm sorry Mom but this is how it has to be

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23 comments

[n/a] Shuushin 12-Jun-04/8:44 AM Reply

This would be better for a verb tense sweep.

"Often I sit alone and wondered"

"What does he has that Dad didn't?"

stuff like that.

[n/a] arduinn › Shuushin 12-Jun-04/7:22 PM Reply

ok.. i get what you mean... thanx

[10] zodiac 12-Jun-04/10:12 AM Reply

What language is spoken in Singapore? Is it Malay?

[n/a] arduinn › zodiac 12-Jun-04/7:21 PM Reply

English is the language widely spoken here but Malay is my native language... If you don't mind me asking, why did you ask?

How did you know about this Malay language anyway?

[n/a] arduinn › zodiac 12-Jun-04/7:45 PM Reply

oh and thanx for the ten

[7] richa 12-Jun-04/3:12 PM Reply

Reads quite nicely. The conflict at the end is far too cliched though, needs some kind of insight or... something.

[6] horus8 12-Jun-04/4:17 PM Reply

Pass me the boiled water and funnel.

[1] god'swife 12-Jun-04/6:46 PM Reply

A substancial as a miracle whip and cheez-whiz sandwich, and just as tasty.

[n/a] arduinn › god'swife 12-Jun-04/7:50 PM Reply

I find that you are hard to satisfy but it's a good thing.. Thanx for finding the time to comment...

[3] killingjuliet 13-Jun-04/8:41 AM Reply

teenage angst

[9] titan69 14-Jun-04/12:48 PM Reply

I like this i can picture what you are saying 9/10

[n/a] arduinn › titan69 27-Jun-04/6:23 AM Reply

glad tt i got the msg across.. thanx

[1] god'swife 14-Jun-04/7:17 PM Reply

You write poems that sound like Yoda, or I should say, like Yoda sounds, poems you write.

[n/a] arduinn › god'swife 17-Jun-04/1:08 AM Reply

hahaha.. i do enjoy watching Star Wars..

[9] electroman1979 26-Jun-04/1:15 AM Reply

good poem, -9-

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › electroman1979 26-Jun-04/6:34 AM Reply

You're such a fat cock. Is this your idea of "constructive criticism"? It's exactly the same as saying "shit poeme, -0-", except instead of telling the truth it inflates them with an absurdly misguided sense of whooshing pride. Perhaps you're thinking of writing some buncombe along the lines of "well I think its important to encourage people to write poetry, just because you dont like something doesnt mean it isnt good". Well don't.

[10] | Broken | 26-Jun-04/10:50 PM Reply

It's good .. thumbs up! ... You managed to make others
feel your emotions and you explained the poem well.

[n/a] Mus Vai 2-Jul-04/7:52 AM Reply

Yeh this one's real. I like it.

[7] Prince of Void 24-Aug-04/2:10 AM Reply

very good ..

[10] sliver 10-Sep-04/3:59 PM Reply

Well, it appears that two of my poems have made their way to Arduinn's favorites list. To what do I owe this fine pleasure? thank you for the compliment!

[n/a] arduinn › sliver 11-Sep-04/6:37 AM Reply

hmm.. are there really two? well, what can I say.. I like your style...

[10] sliver › arduinn 11-Sep-04/7:33 AM Reply

Yea? and I like yers. BTW, I am also NoSage, It's my name, jason, pronounced backwards. c ya

[n/a] arduinn › sliver 14-Sep-04/6:49 AM Reply

ahh.. great... thanks
do continue writing great pieces k..!