Replying to a comment on:

Lost (Free verse) by arduinn

Whatever has happened to us? No more love, faith or trust I dream of the times we spent When I was young Then, you were around When I cried My tears you wiped When I was lonely You played with me It was over all too soon Now my life is in ruin Bitter memories in abandon Precious moments were just borrowed heaven Often I sat alone and wondered Questions I have are left unanswered What did he had that Dad didn't? Was it impossible for him to learn? Why wasn't I enough To hold the family together? What about my sisters and brother? Come on Mom, I was only three Was it that easy To just give up on the family? From them you took me away Leaving everything in disarray But you were always so busy You never had time for me So now I have no other choice but to leave I'm sorry Mom but this is how it has to be

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 26-Jun-04/6:34 AM
You're such a fat cock. Is this your idea of "constructive criticism"? It's exactly the same as saying "shit poeme, -0-", except instead of telling the truth it inflates them with an absurdly misguided sense of whooshing pride. Perhaps you're thinking of writing some buncombe along the lines of "well I think its important to encourage people to write poetry, just because you dont like something doesnt mean it isnt good". Well don't.




Track and Plan your submissions ; Read some Comics ; Get Paid for your Poetry
PoemRanker Copyright © 2001 - 2024 - kaolin fire - All Rights Reserved
All poems Copyright © their respective authors
An internet tradition since June 9, 2001