I really don't understand a lot of the language in this. What is/are "the recent new of guiltless lovers?"

I like a few individual lines in this, especially "To steal dots and mimic lines."
I assume "down under" refers to "inside," but I can't help seeing it as a sexual reference in this context.

More visual art than poetry, especially when taken in a poetic context, but powerful nonetheless.

Bitter resignment. I only take slight issue with the isolation/cages metaphor. It's a little too overused.
Thought about starting a new stanza at "familiar smells"?

"being ate"? You push those verb conjugations far enough and they'll scream at ya.
Rambling, and the ending is just plain cheesy. Plus, the rhyming is so rigid that there's no room for the rhythm to get off, but it still does.
Sorry.

Aye, good cleaning up.
Also, I have a problem with "I sat in a cloud." With all of the Western imagery associated with clouds, it's difficult to put yourself in (or on) one and still have the reader believe that you are lonesome and/or depressed. Think of Zeuss, angels, and of course, Mick Jagger!

Easy for most nature lovers to identify with, and your use of repetitions is well-received, at least by me. Looks like a lot of effort and appreciation went into this.
Have to knock you for giving your own poem a 10 though (remember, your IP is always logged whether logged in or not).
Well done though.

Something about this just reminds of a Doobie Brothers' song (I think it's obvious which one).
I love the subject and the language, but the 3rd staza seems out of place amongst those same elements.

The juvenile innocence conveyed by the writing is definitely cute and amplifies the subject matter. The blaring spelling errors though are just a little too much to give it that Toys r' Us backwards R quality which may have made it too juvenile anyway.

One of the better synopses of a mushroom trip that I've seen. Agreed about the last stanza though. Maybe a little too conversational to blend with the rest of the work. You do have some good imagery there, and it would be a shame to waste it, so maybe just try and incorporate it with the rhythm of previous stanzas.

This is very well-written. I'm always drawn to these poems which seem to expand the reflection of a single moment and tell a story of feelings instead of events.
I especially like this because it really made no sense to me until I read into the things that seemed out of place.
I feel that the introduction of the characters is a little too strong since the conclusion doesn't really wrap up their stories.

I love your use of color. "burry (sic) itself beneath copper blankets" is a great line.
The only issue I have is with the thought of the fourth stanza continuing into the fifth so fluidly since no other stanzas do this.

I like the subject (what would Mona Lisa think about her centuries of fame and the insane crowds that flock to see her in Paris). It seems very lyrical to me, and I can't help feeling that this distracts the reader from the subject and makes it a little too light-hearted for its own good.
Love that last line though.

The poem makes you (the writer) come off as arrogant. I like the image of the tiny ray keeping away the darkness, but "Led me find myself" doesn't really work grammatically and sounds awkward when spoken. You may want to either change it to "Led me to find myself" or "Let me find myself." It just depends on what you want to project.

Love it! Especially the use of sequential numbers as an introduction.
Concise, abrupt and blount, but I still have that clear image of a tired commuter waiting for a train. What is the commute good for if not to let us dwell on our own depression?
Only small critique is that "But in of itself" is a little confusing. Still though, great.

Is "without out" in the first line a typo?
You may want to considering adding line breaks, especially where things rhyme like at "me" and at "day."
There needs to be some sort of punctuation between "around you" and "I got out."

Is this an addition to the Lynyrd Skynyrd song?

good imagery

*belief instead of believe
Comes off as somewhat pretentious, and loses its focus somewhat in the third part (after "because they are the same").

This is really good. I don't mean to make assumptions on your influences, but this does actually sound like a lot of Wilco lyrics.