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Prose Poem № 110261

A beautiful moment

Member since 2004 · Posted 10 Aug 2004 · 3 comments

A beautiful moment, Without a trace of regret. In fragments of memories, Of agents of change. The red ball of fire, scorching relentlessly. Evaporating the early shower, Vanishing the early grey moods. Vibrant colours of the rainbow, Beneath the blue blue sky. Emitting a flash, Of seven brights. As swallows fly by, In a fluttering wave, Against the wind bearing, Towards the horizon. They relish their freedom, And the power of unity. The breeze of buoyancy, Fills the boundless limits, Sweeping away the fallen leaves, Of yesterday. But alas, change is inevitable. The effects of time, Cannot be reversed. Day and night, merely nouns to simplify the complexity of this unstoppable force. And yes, a moment can be extended to eternity. I see day change to night, Without a sight, It just happened. Oh do you feel the passion, Of the bright shining stars? Within their dazzles, Lay thousands of angels. Apex of nightfall, Melodies of harp, Can you see Cupid, Shooting his arrows? The bond of lovebirds, Instantly fortified, Genuinely certified, delightfully magnified. Ahh marvel the world of nature, Gratifying all desires! Consuming love, Igniting fire. In sparks by sparks, You can't deny it, Nor can you ignore it. The sound of music, Amongst a cricket's cry. Crisp and clear, You can hear it, You can feel it. So splendid, You feel like flying, You feel like flying. Wings. You are bornt with them. Go on! Do not fear, There is no fear in love. Oh yes my dear. Fly high! FREEZE Motion adjourned. Dead silence. The colours are fading, The music is draining. Ahh my miserable soul, I am dissipating... Quick! Lock it within... Its such a beautiful moment...

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3 comments

[7] Dovina 10-Aug-04/11:20 AM Reply
Too etherial for me, but some nice lines.
[8] unknown^user 10-Aug-04/2:06 PM Reply
Easy for most nature lovers to identify with, and your use of repetitions is well-received, at least by me. Looks like a lot of effort and appreciation went into this.
Have to knock you for giving your own poem a 10 though (remember, your IP is always logged whether logged in or not).
Well done though.
[n/a] freelancejoker › unknown^user 10-Aug-04/8:32 PM Reply
Well unknown^user, i did... haha... so disgusted at myself.. tee hee.. but then again.. i wanted ppl to read it, so added a little score to make it more appealing... haha... well.. i failed.. i was hoping for more comments as i put in a lot of effort to this piece...