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Missing Grand Miss. (Other) by timtonio
A place where two days time is five years of livin Head'n out from shore I lay back and do my fish'n Boats ropin up, Merriton Ferry all day been a sittin Straw Cap up, clothes damp and left a drippin Mighty big Miss always runs down but never goes dry Mighty big Miss never rows up but always stops by Mighty big Miss I ain't never gonna leave..well at least till I up and die. A "go go" world where work consumes. To spend a dime I need to work for two. For the unchosen masses stress is always assumed. All of our days we vie to be one of the elitist few. Grand Mississippi, you always run down but you never run dry. Grand Mississippi, you never row up, yet you always stop by. Grand Mississippi, Oh, how I wish I were back looking up at that clear blue sky.

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.8
Weighted score: 5.2145653
Overall Rank: 4368
Posted: August 5, 2004 6:45 PM PDT; Last modified: August 5, 2004 6:45 PM PDT
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[8] New Life Drug @ 69.106.227.126 | 6-Aug-04/12:10 AM | Reply
reminded me of Loretta Lynn
[8] unknown^user @ 209.234.180.162 | 6-Aug-04/12:04 PM | Reply
Something about this just reminds of a Doobie Brothers' song (I think it's obvious which one).
I love the subject and the language, but the 3rd staza seems out of place amongst those same elements.
[n/a] timtonio @ 172.162.226.67 | 6-Aug-04/1:06 PM | Reply
Yes, it was meant to be out of place. :)
[n/a] timtonio @ 172.162.226.67 | 6-Aug-04/1:09 PM | Reply
In other words "I ain't never gonna leave..well at least till I up and die." was more of a dream. The 3rd stanza was meant to sound more mature, and well written as if written by a more educated person that moved away and found a life. I prefer not to spoil it too much feel free to read farther into it though :)
[n/a] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 > timtonio | 6-Aug-04/1:20 PM | Reply
Why not put your reply under the comment you're replying to, like this. I fail to see a mature person saying "All of our days we vie to be one of the elitist few."
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