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Drinking before noon with Bukowski (Free verse) by Beyond_Dreams
It was one of the few days I had went to the bar to drink before noon. Ah, the hell with it I thought. I'm a single mom and they're both in school. I eyed an older fellow taking shots of whiskey; while a tuna sandwich sat next to him, untouched. I smiled; he looked away. I thought to myself, I can't even pick up an alcoholic man! What the hell is wrong with me? So I ordered another drink and slammed it down. Wondering how I was going to pay my rent, where could I find another job? A downward spiral elliptical in motion; never ending depression. But the older man got up put his drink down. Walked over and sat down beside me. Told the bartender, 2 more of what she's having. He started to talk; About how he was a writer, Explaining to me the ins and outs of American employment and how to avoid the army. Said he was a hard drinking, misogynistic bully. I didn't much take to his conversation at this point; I looked away. He told me I had a great pair of legs as his hand slid up to my knee. I stopped him there. "You're a dirty old man!" He took a hit of his cigarette and asked me what I did for a living. "I'm an actor, well I want to be one any way." He looked at me and told me I'd never make it. Got up and walked away. I yelled "What's your name?" He said, "I like bad liquor and bad women, you can call me Buk"

Up the ladder: No delusions.
Down the ladder: Too Tired for a Title

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.8
Weighted score: 5.2145653
Overall Rank: 4366
Posted: March 17, 2005 11:51 AM PST; Last modified: March 17, 2005 12:32 PM PST
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[7] Dovina @ 12.72.11.42 | 17-Mar-05/1:03 PM | Reply
You’ve encountered the typical American man. I’ve been told on good authority that if you don’t do it, they don’t want you. I’ve met several who walked away for the same reason. But I have to confess that his hand slipping under my skirt to my knee, or a little past, aroused tender desires, mostly the kind that wanted to give a hug to a lonely man. And I still believe that’s what he’d want if he could sort out his feelings. That’s why I don’t give up.
[n/a] zodiac @ 212.118.19.192 > Dovina | 18-Mar-05/9:52 PM | Reply
I propose that's the typical American man because American women make it so easy to for us to be that way and still get laid.
[7] Dovina @ 12.72.8.105 > zodiac | 20-Mar-05/6:39 AM | Reply
But greater pleasure comes when both emotional and sensual desires are tantilized, then fulfilled in both partners.
[n/a] zodiac @ 212.118.19.211 > Dovina | 21-Mar-05/10:26 PM | Reply
You're a regular I Ching, aren't you? Incidentally, that's exactly the kind of thing I'm talking about.

Can I ask you a question? How many couplings do you know that meet all of the requirements above? Of the ones that don't, how often is the woman the silent sufferer? How often is the man?
[8] edpeterson @ 68.79.58.40 | 17-Mar-05/7:40 PM | Reply
I thought this was good, right up until the last few lines.
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