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Free verse № 110325

The Hundredth End

Member since 2003 · Posted 11 Aug 2004 · 2 comments

When the dusk spitted forth your egocentric air I plotted against the waters to resume a game of mindless sensation To reward the senses with free verses and haikus And alleviate my instinctive pain Down under And when the next dawn showered my kisses through a glass wall With your face on the other side And your lips locked on its opacity To let this blood ooze again in your embrace I will never know Because down under My kisses will remain but a patch in your memory And my pen only a brush of crimson in your book To steal dots and mimic lines For me to hold you again despite the wall With your face on the other side.

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[7] unknown^user 11-Aug-04/8:22 PM Reply
I like a few individual lines in this, especially "To steal dots and mimic lines."
I assume "down under" refers to "inside," but I can't help seeing it as a sexual reference in this context.
[10] Lifeboatman 4-Dec-08/3:14 PM Reply
I imagine this being written more than six years ago, and it is... how much you were of a grown up then in your own universe, and how you are still growing in this... been a while, dear.... hope you are fine.