Comments byChristof, 741–760 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

on {Porn*Star}{Hai*kus} by horus8 23 Aug 2002, 6:04 AM
I think my girlfriend's a Leo and we get on alright. I'm a Scorpio. So what does that mean? Someone enlighten me!
on Sleep Well by jriemerm 23 Aug 2002, 5:44 AM
This is great. May the birds always be sleeping.
on Hey! Shut up, and cut my grass. by horus8 23 Aug 2002, 4:26 AM
Actually, not sure that it's a metaphor on another reading, but it's still fantastic.
on Hey! Shut up, and cut my grass. by horus8 23 Aug 2002, 4:25 AM
The first part of this is truly great - the rest sort of tails off into your customary madness - but the metaphor of the lawn is bloody fantastic.
on Sunset Cycle by Jsylum 23 Aug 2002, 4:19 AM
Is that a reference to Thomas Hardy an Matthew Arnold in the second verse? Because you seem to have bought into the whole Arnold 'scholar gipsy' gig - wandering beyond limits, looking at the failings of the world from afar etc. I think though that you need to cut down on the number of words used. This sounds very 19th century.
on {Porn*Star}{Hai*kus} by horus8 23 Aug 2002, 3:40 AM
This astrological stuff just confuses me. How do you guess? I don't even want to know what sign you think I am, Arsewipe or something..but anyhoo, I lke your porn star haikus. They tell a story and they're as dirty-bright as tin foil.
on The Wonderful Creators by abecedarian 23 Aug 2002, 3:28 AM
This is a good moment of negative capability and just living rather than worrying about living. I like it.
on Sheep---(Cross Rhyming) by shwenatjadeflower 23 Aug 2002, 3:18 AM
Don't listen to the stuff about abbreviations - MVP's really works here with copies. The rhyme of cool and Tool is funny as well. This has real bite.
on Window poems by kawakurdi 23 Aug 2002, 2:43 AM
This is worth it for the first 3 lines of part four - they are a poem on their own
on Dark Lady by quantumenterprises 23 Aug 2002, 2:41 AM
An Ode to Newky Brown has got to enter the pantheon of poesy. This is Keats on his third bottle, and he's loving it.
on Titanic by DespondentDotCom 23 Aug 2002, 2:36 AM
Couldn't agree more with your sentiments though
on The Matrix by DespondentDotCom 23 Aug 2002, 2:32 AM
But don't you wish you had a long black coat like Keanu's?
This is fantastic, and no doubt historically accurate. It's a long time since I laughed out loud at my computer. Bonza.
on saving myself for marriage by Venus 23 Aug 2002, 2:08 AM
That's better - good and tumescent!
on Butcher by Christof 23 Aug 2002, 1:01 AM
Hey, print it out for your kitchen wall with my blessing! That's the nicest thing anyone has ever said about my stuff so consider it yours.
on Awesome Heir by Shin-Bojangles 22 Aug 2002, 8:49 AM
I didn't even see the film. How ignorant of me.
on Awesome Heir by Shin-Bojangles 22 Aug 2002, 8:23 AM
Just out of curiosity... is there one hell of a big Tolkien-loving contingent on poemranker? I never got into the habit after reading The Hobbit and now I seem to be missing out on something. Aragorn for instance - what?
on The Siren by 1Sapphire1 22 Aug 2002, 8:04 AM
This is sweetly regretful. Perhaps 'blind' should be 'deaf' just to reinforce the unity of your central image? But it doesn't really matter. Your final two lines are the best because of their colloquialism.
on drum circle by <~> 22 Aug 2002, 7:55 AM
I also wonder if this is a bit ragged around the edges, but the concrete section in the middle is beuatifully handled.
on Salt by <~> 22 Aug 2002, 7:52 AM
Remind me not to get on your bad side. This is great and full of venom.