Re: Innsmouth by razorgrin	27-Aug-02/7:09 AM
I think I need to read some Lovecraft/MR James/Poe etc because there's a lot of stuff on here that I don't get. I bemoan my ignorance.
Re: School by shwenatjadeflower	27-Aug-02/6:31 AM
When I had hair, it was red, and my oh my how I feel your pain. I especially like the 'Heh'. Every poem should have one. Bonza.
Re: she wonders, by <~>	23-Aug-02/6:33 AM
If he doesn't do these things , he is a cad and a bounder. I'm sure he could be persuaded.
Re: Dignity by kthulah	23-Aug-02/6:09 AM
OK, but that background is not clear from the poem itself. But don't get me wrong - I think the dignity of the piece comes over loud and clear.
Re: {Porn*Star}{Hai*kus} by horus8	23-Aug-02/6:04 AM
I think my girlfriend's a Leo and we get on alright. I'm a Scorpio. So what does that mean? Someone enlighten me!
Re: Dignity by kthulah	23-Aug-02/5:50 AM
I like the argument of this - it is very sonnet-like, and so is the 14-line form although you've not gone for a rhyme scheme. I'm not sure the final couplet convinces though - plainly the narrator doesn't love this person more than their dignity, rather, they are afraid of rejection I would think. After all, it is easier to love from afar than to test your love on the 'front line'.
Re: Sleep Well by jriemerm	23-Aug-02/5:44 AM
This is great. May the birds always be sleeping.
Re: Hey! Shut up, and cut my grass. by horus8	23-Aug-02/4:26 AM
Actually, not sure that it's a metaphor on another reading, but it's still fantastic.
Re: Hey! Shut up, and cut my grass. by horus8	23-Aug-02/4:25 AM
The first part of this is truly great - the rest sort of tails off into your customary madness - but the metaphor of the lawn is bloody fantastic.
Re: Sunset Cycle by Jsylum	23-Aug-02/4:19 AM
Is that a reference to Thomas Hardy an Matthew Arnold in the second verse? Because you seem to have bought into the whole Arnold 'scholar gipsy' gig - wandering beyond limits, looking at the failings of the world from afar etc. I think though that you need to cut down on the number of words used. This sounds very 19th century.
Re: {Porn*Star}{Hai*kus} by horus8	23-Aug-02/3:40 AM
This astrological stuff just confuses me. How do you guess? I don't even want to know what sign you think I am, Arsewipe or something..but anyhoo, I lke your porn star haikus. They tell a story and they're as dirty-bright as tin foil.
Re: The Wonderful Creators by abecedarian	23-Aug-02/3:28 AM
This is a good moment of negative capability and just living rather than worrying about living. I like it.
Re: Sheep---(Cross Rhyming) by shwenatjadeflower	23-Aug-02/3:18 AM
Don't listen to the stuff about abbreviations - MVP's really works here with copies. The rhyme of cool and Tool is funny as well. This has real bite.
Re: Window poems by kawakurdi	23-Aug-02/2:43 AM
This is worth it for the first 3 lines of part four - they are a poem on their own
Re: Dark Lady by quantumenterprises	23-Aug-02/2:41 AM
An Ode to Newky Brown has got to enter the pantheon of poesy. This is Keats on his third bottle, and he's loving it.
Re: Titanic by DespondentDotCom	23-Aug-02/2:36 AM
Couldn't agree more with your sentiments though
Re: The Matrix by DespondentDotCom	23-Aug-02/2:32 AM
But don't you wish you had a long black coat like Keanu's?
Re: Gilded Stumps of Olde (AN STORY THAT IS NOT AN POEME) by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	23-Aug-02/2:17 AM
This is fantastic, and no doubt historically accurate. It's a long time since I laughed out loud at my computer. Bonza.
Re: saving myself for marriage by Venus	23-Aug-02/2:08 AM
That's better - good and tumescent!
Re: Butcher by Christof	23-Aug-02/1:01 AM
Hey, print it out for your kitchen wall with my blessing! That's the nicest thing anyone has ever said about my stuff so consider it yours.