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The Siren (Free verse) by 1Sapphire1 There was a time,
when I wished:
I was blind,
and that I couldn't hear the song of the siren.
But it's been so long,
since I have heard your song
and if I said I didn't miss you
then I would be lying.
Up the ladder:
How could I ask for anything more?
Down the ladder:
Dressed to Kill
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Posted: August 22, 2002 7:34 AM PDT; Last modified: August 22, 2002 7:34 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.8569565 Overall Rank: 10442 Comments:
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Christof @ 195.172.133.226
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22-Aug-02/8:04 AM
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This is sweetly regretful. Perhaps 'blind' should be 'deaf' just to reinforce the unity of your central image? But it doesn't really matter. Your final two lines are the best because of their colloquialism.
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