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The Siren (Free verse) by 1Sapphire1

There was a time, when I wished: I was blind, and that I couldn't hear the song of the siren. But it's been so long, since I have heard your song and if I said I didn't miss you then I would be lying.

Christof 22-Aug-02/8:04 AM
This is sweetly regretful. Perhaps 'blind' should be 'deaf' just to reinforce the unity of your central image? But it doesn't really matter. Your final two lines are the best because of their colloquialism.




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