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2-Oct-02/7:57 AM |
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I have these dreams too. It would so liven up the city.
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| Re: Poem #5 (of a series of poems for Boo) by Owner of the Sky |
2-Oct-02/8:15 AM |
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Lovely, just one typo- 'autumn'. I like the last four lines especially.
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| Re: Thanksgiving Dream Sequence by Venus |
3-Oct-02/3:09 AM |
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Great stuff - reality, fantasy, pain, recognition.
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| Re: boom by UAFANTHORPEY |
3-Oct-02/7:29 AM |
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I don't see the UA Fanthorpe connection either, but I do see Shaggy.
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| Re: The silent moon by UAFANTHORPEY |
3-Oct-02/7:30 AM |
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Is this a song lyric? For some reason it sounds like one
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| Re: Suburbia in December by Nicholas Jones |
3-Oct-02/7:32 AM |
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An little element of comedy in the middle (the people's non-superficial injuries)- i'd like to see more of that. I wonder if you need the last two lines? The atmosphgere of this I like
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| Re: Temptation Stings, Midday Nashville by <~> |
3-Oct-02/7:37 AM |
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Can you get me a rhinestone cowboy suit while you're there? A white one with a big hat? Thanks.
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| Re: Down Home by <~> |
3-Oct-02/7:38 AM |
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A different colour with every line - the effects really accumulate - smashing
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| Re: On The Bench Outside Gruhn's Guitars by <~> |
3-Oct-02/7:40 AM |
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| Re: Ode to Molly by knickytoy |
3-Oct-02/7:41 AM |
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I like this, 'wittle' and all, but what's naugahyde? You have a habit of writing poems referring to things I've heard of!
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| Re: Endymion Dead by vulcan |
4-Oct-02/5:21 AM |
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Keats this time? A good and concise response.
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| Re: Sonnet For a Porn Star by mikejedw |
4-Oct-02/5:23 AM |
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I think the third quatrain lets this poem down a bit; it seems to reduce rather than express her pain. But the couplet is a killer. Well done.
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| Re: Suburbia in December by Nicholas Jones |
4-Oct-02/7:01 AM |
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Yes that is better - tighter.
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| Re: Possibilities by Nicholas Jones |
4-Oct-02/7:05 AM |
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The proverbial embarrassment of riches. I'd start with Stockport.
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| Re: Truths by Nicholas Jones |
4-Oct-02/7:07 AM |
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Very good - the dilemma of the socialist faced with New Labour. What a middle-class and furtive party it is now. Which is why I always vote Liberal Democrat - as if that's any great alternative.
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| Re: Truths by Nicholas Jones |
4-Oct-02/7:08 AM |
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4-Oct-02/7:25 AM |
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| Re: Farewell Song by jaalko |
4-Oct-02/7:32 AM |
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I think you're right, this is by far not the worst thing on poemranker.
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4-Oct-02/7:36 AM |
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It's 'post-self-coital' - so this is surely masturbatory? You'll go blind, you know.
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| Re: The Journal by 1Sapphire1 |
4-Oct-02/7:38 AM |
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I like the situation and the heart-break
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