| Re: Would I? by Limness |
30-Sep-02/2:34 AM |
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That is the question any writer must face - stay human or write like a god? Very well put.
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| Re: The Mill by vulcan |
30-Sep-02/2:35 AM |
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Yep, very nice. 'softly immortal' is lovely.
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30-Sep-02/2:37 AM |
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Lovely and compact and says it all. Sometimes two lines is just enough.
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| Re: Witch to Wicca by Lenore |
30-Sep-02/2:45 AM |
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This is a bit mysterious to me as the only Wiccan I ever met was a scary South African girl who tried to seduce me at a conference. (Told me I had typical Scorpio's eyes, whatever that might mean. But it was spooky 'cos I am a Scorpio.) I didn't stick around long enough to find out whether she burnt her house down or about the elements or whatever. Nevertheless, I get the metaphors here and they're very strong. And I especially like your conclusions about the nature of God i.e. he/she/it is an invention to salve human fears.
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| Re: This Is The Sound of My Heart Breaking by Owner of the Sky |
30-Sep-02/3:31 AM |
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This is perhaps a bit overlnog and wordy, but the images accumulate powerfully.
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| Re: Cheap Thrills by Owner of the Sky |
30-Sep-02/3:33 AM |
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I like this. To the point, sharp, sad.
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| Re: Wondering Soul by Katie |
30-Sep-02/6:26 AM |
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Your use of language is a bit peculiar sometimes - neither 'blithe' nor 'askew' is a noun. I wonder if you could find proper adjectives?
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| Re: Infection by bluwiz |
30-Sep-02/7:37 AM |
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I've just come back to this. It's nasty and gruesome. I like it.
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| Re: Hands. by LucidRevelation |
1-Oct-02/7:39 AM |
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As a gentleman I feel I should look the other way while you girls get on with it...
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| Re: Howl For Clarity (for Jeff Buckley) by Bachus |
1-Oct-02/7:42 AM |
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You gotta love Jeff Buckley, and this poem is great. A little bottle or two is damn right. I saw the man play in Bristol in 199-something and he was incredible. My Makers Mark habit started that night. Anyhow. Glad your show went well.
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1-Oct-02/7:51 AM |
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A wall of sound then? Can you hear it from space?
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| Re: The Good Old Days in New Orleans by cobalt |
1-Oct-02/8:20 AM |
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I must agree with Brazen - good show. Nice to meet you Cobalt.
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| Re: 5 p.m. by cobalt |
1-Oct-02/8:22 AM |
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Great use of alliteration and assonance in this - I can hear traffic.
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| Re: calendared by cobalt |
1-Oct-02/8:24 AM |
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This is strangely old-fashioned, like Francis Thompson or something, but the rhythm bounces away with inevitability - smashing
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1-Oct-02/8:28 AM |
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Things don't sound so good for you and your man if this is anything to go by... Stanza 3 is especially good, I like the personification of insanity, which is like another self taking over the usual self.
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2-Oct-02/6:45 AM |
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One thing we don't do is fight? Is that what you meant? And if you don't fight with your God and test it, what the hell point is there to being alive? Don't be a sponge.
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| Re: Local Boy Makes Good by Gwyrfab |
2-Oct-02/6:59 AM |
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This is very funny. This is exactly what would happen if Jesus turned up in Wales. Have you read Nicholas Jones's stuff on here?
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| Re: The Cross Foxes by Gwyrfab |
2-Oct-02/7:01 AM |
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A rugby song for poets. And a funny last verse.
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| Re: Ode to the Severn Bridge by Gwyrfab |
2-Oct-02/7:05 AM |
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| Re: Entropy by knickytoy |
2-Oct-02/7:07 AM |
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You promised a poem on entropy and, my girl, you delivered. I am slightly freaked by beer excreting stuff - I shall steer clear of the pub for a while I think. Great image to choose.
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