Re: a comment on All in Love by gothiclovepoetiss	gothiclovepoetiss 66.82.9.89	2-Jul-05/4:57 PM
1:ok im truly sorry that you havent felt this way about anyone 2:all of those things mentioned are possessions if there is love you really shouldnt need anything else 3:true love is real all you have to do is find it!! 4:if the life i live is truly happy, not saying perfect, then how will it be boring???
Re: What's my favorite scar. by darby pyn	Dovina 12.72.4.83	2-Jul-05/6:25 AM
I'd like it better with good punctuation and complete sentences and line breaks at meaningful locations. As is, you can know if a man's a guitar player by feeling the tips of his fingers on the left hand. And I can see from the last lines you're angry. But I think it would be stronger with fewer words.
Re: Uncorked by impert&ent	Dovina 12.72.4.83	2-Jul-05/6:18 AM
You have totally changed the poem and called it an edit. I think it's better to post a new poem. Anyway, this depends on a reader's knowledge of allusions. Maybe it means something to someone else.
Re: Try Thinking Too by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	darby pyn 207.200.116.130	2-Jul-05/12:44 AM
very vivid. well done. 8
Re: My Little Africa (edit) by Nuit	darby pyn 207.200.116.130	2-Jul-05/12:07 AM
I enjoyed this. well done.
Re: a comment on What's my favorite scar. by darby pyn	darby pyn 207.200.116.197	1-Jul-05/11:02 PM
Thank you Nuit.
Re: Drowsy by elderking	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.165	1-Jul-05/5:42 PM
Those waltz days, Those do-not-run days, that lounge... Yeah! Great mood-ivation.
Re: a comment on My Little Africa (edit) by Nuit	Nuit 86.128.205.238	1-Jul-05/4:24 PM
Fair comment. I ammended the last verse as I felt it may cause unintentional offence, hence(edit) Thanx for the imput.
Re: it's okay to cry, idiot by calliope	Dovina 12.72.7.163	1-Jul-05/4:08 PM
"idiot" in the title detracts. Line 2 could be left out without loss.
Re: My Little Africa (edit) by Nuit	Dovina 12.72.7.163	1-Jul-05/4:05 PM
illution - us a spell checker. I think the voice of the first verse could be carried through to greater effect. Toward the end it get whiney and loses impact.
Re: a comment on Gratitude by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.7.163	1-Jul-05/3:57 PM
Surely you have seen enjoyment in a cow’s face while eating; I mean while the cow was eating. So the anthropomorphosis problem is not in the pleasure of eating, but in relating the pleasure to ancestors who made eating possible. If I were to fancy that kind of thinking in a gazelle or lion, for example, how is that more plausible than a nose-ringed bull? Anyway, the analogy to human thinking is what I’m aiming for, as you know—the way I sometimes feel grateful for the courting and sex that make this hamburger enjoyable. Maybe I’ll go at it from another angle.
Re: a comment on WHAT KIND OF FOOL ARE YOU? by Joshua_Tree	Joshua_Tree 68.230.105.101	1-Jul-05/2:11 PM
We'd love to have our best work come out everytime we put pen to paper, but that is unfortunately not so. I maintain some delusions or pretensions of being published during my lifetime, so I hold back on posting anything until I have some measure of objectivity. Book and magazine publishers want rights of first publication if they are going to pay for a piece. Those rights aren't available if you've published the material in any manner, including self-publishing or posting on the Internet. Some people are prolific or polished enough that they could spew forth professional verse on a continuous basis. I'm not like that. I rely heavily on a system of constant revision to get the layers of flavor that I want into a poem. Like an accomplished chef, I might invite the opinions of others when working on an appetizer or a soup, but a new desert or entree will not see the light of day until it meets my demanding specifications. My B material is "vestigial, workable." When it comes to my A material, I'm rather intransigent.
Re: What's my favorite scar. by darby pyn	Nuit 86.128.123.14	1-Jul-05/12:21 PM
Very well written.
Re: a comment on Gratitude by Dovina	Shuushin 147.154.235.53	1-Jul-05/11:47 AM
I don't know D, I'm having trouble with the whole cow thing with the visibly enjoying the grazing to the running and mating. Now that you've gone through the trouble of showing me his enjoyment I can't seem to anthropromorphize him to a plausible degree. I love cows, I think they are cool and have a personality - but - I don't know. Another animal maybe? Incidently I found out today why they put rings on cow's noses. The other reason.
Re: a comment on Eagle by Mr Pig	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	1-Jul-05/3:01 AM
Shut up Blue Magpie, do relish techinical detail if so you miss the point of poetry. Imagine your take on the work of Wordsworth: "I wandered lonely as a cloud" Actually, clouds can't be lonely as they are formed of water vapour and don't have feelings, and often clouds appear in groups known as "fronts" so even if they did have feelings, which they don't, then they would not actually be lonely. you birk.
Re: a comment on id by FreeFormFixation	FreeFormFixation 68.77.118.134	1-Jul-05/1:15 AM
i made it all up
Re: All Alone by pinay_miss_azn	sliver 172.191.199.172	30-Jun-05/10:40 PM
This one doesn't seem to hold your essence like the last two of yours I've read, something's missing.
Re: You and I by pinay_miss_azn	sliver 172.191.199.172	30-Jun-05/10:38 PM
So few really look in the eyes, it's always something else.Yet blue eyes can be a harbour for a lost soul.
Re: After A Love is Lost by pinay_miss_azn	sliver 172.191.199.172	30-Jun-05/10:34 PM
When I first started reading this I wanted to tell you that the pain will subside... Scars are just something to brag about in a way.
Re: a comment on Old Friends by sliver	sliver 172.191.199.172	30-Jun-05/10:24 PM
Thank you, that means alot to me.