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Try Thinking Too (Free verse) by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk The paint thickens on the walls
as the sound of your
voice etches the window panes
with a romantic design
made to warp vision
and creativity in
one long-winded sigh.
Passion and intelligence
are not mutually
exclusive elements in
your unbending word choices,
but so often the
former is used while the
latter is left outside
like a dog with mange
glossy coat notwithstanding.
Up the ladder:
Thanks again
Down the ladder:
broken
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Posted: June 30, 2005 12:40 AM PDT; Last modified: June 30, 2005 12:40 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.179294 Overall Rank: 4827 Comments:
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zodiac @ 194.165.157.165
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30-Jun-05/3:39 AM
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I've spent the last fifteen minutes thinking about how intelligence may be like a dog with mange. I've got nothing. Sounds cool, though.
So she has a glossy coat of passion covering mangy skin of unintelligence. Sounds like a passionate way of saying it.
the glossy coat is on the un-manged intellect (dog) that is being ignored for the sake of passionate expression.
very vivid.
well done. 8
bullshit
Splendid...
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