Re: a comment on Seekers by Dovina	Dovina 24.52.236.153	14-Sep-05/3:09 PM
Oh, that was too far back if you know what I mean. BTW, you're more right than you may know about Chequers - only a vacant store front across Main Street on the east side of the courthouse.
Re: Seekers by Dovina	wilco 66.61.101.130	14-Sep-05/3:06 PM
I'd love to see you post that one from a while back...I don't remember what it was called but it was really good...something about being in fashion...I don't know....get on that, though ok?
Re: Creation by Quarton	wilco 66.61.101.130	14-Sep-05/3:03 PM
eventually This seems more like a science textbook put to rhyme than a poem...give it some feeling.
Re: a comment on Éire by TLRufener	TLRufener 140.146.216.76	14-Sep-05/2:59 PM
Thank you.
Re: Creation by Quarton	Dovina 24.52.236.153	14-Sep-05/2:50 PM
I find little enobling of thoughts on considering the whole thing in this way. not sublime anyway. Maybe some metaphor or speculation, like a blooming flower or something.
Re: a comment on Rejuvenation by Dovina	Dovina 24.52.236.153	14-Sep-05/2:30 PM
No. Eyes are not organs of reproduction. Flowers are. Of course you could take the arguement that the sole function of any organ is to help the organism reproduce. Your wisdom teeth, (misnamed), for example, then - what are they for?
Re: a comment on My Big Butt by Dovina	Dovina 24.52.236.153	14-Sep-05/2:24 PM
The worst of it is having to sit beside a big blob of flesh on an airplane.
Re: One Moment to the Other (v3) by nentwined	Quarton 12.217.202.34	14-Sep-05/12:49 PM
Excellent. The rhyme is unforced and content profound.
Re: Éire by TLRufener	Tintagiles 198.164.250.155	14-Sep-05/12:08 PM
One point for the courage of writing a patriotic poem. Like almost every single other patriotic poem in the history of literature in all languages, it's crap.
Re: (e0)(af)(87e0) by nentwined	zodiac 212.38.134.51	14-Sep-05/1:15 AM
Up to the last bit of the title, I thought this was going to be a poem about Battleship(tm) coordinates. Sadly, it wasn't.
Re: a comment on Rejuvenation by Dovina	zodiac 212.38.134.51	14-Sep-05/1:02 AM
Would you say that the purpose of your eyes is to produce children? Why?
Re: We Were Burnouts by jessicazee	Wakeboarder20 67.183.147.217	13-Sep-05/10:49 PM
Pretty good. Needs to be structured a little though. Some grammatical errors. But overall, different and well written.
Re: a comment on Radio Tele Libre Mille Collines by Muffinly	Muffinly 64.114.134.52	13-Sep-05/10:23 PM
Thanks for the advice
Re: a comment on My addict by Heather Dee	wilco 66.61.101.130	13-Sep-05/8:32 PM
Actually it comes pretty close to rhyimg if your from the south...down here it's mirr.
Re: to all of you by Heather Dee	wilco 66.61.101.130	13-Sep-05/8:03 PM
That's the idea. Don't give a fuck.... about the people who are just being an ass. If you're not going to give a fuck about writing, then why try. I wrote on one of your posts, what felt like a constructive bit...no idea if you even read it though..but seriously...actually work to get better...don't just post any old bit of shit that you write...it's what so many people here do and it's quite annoying. The point, though, is that a few souls have brushed off the tacky shit, taken the constructive criticism and actually improved their writing...it's rare, but it happens. Take Cuddlytiger17....she's no Poe, but she's improved (and to be honest I don't even know if she still posts here, but it's just the first one that came to mind...so...). I'm not gonna vote on this because it seems more like just a last ditch effort to get a point accross than a poem. Here's the best advice I can give you though (and being 26, you probably already know it becaue that's the same age I am and I know it): Assholes are going to keep being assholes, no matter what you say or do...even on the Poemeranker.
Re: the birds are bugs by ay deee	wilco 66.61.101.130	13-Sep-05/7:56 PM
Locusts do suck. I do, however, think that a much better job could be do of saying that here...
Re: a comment on Radio Tele Libre Mille Collines by Muffinly	wilco 66.61.101.130	13-Sep-05/7:35 PM
I'd probably give this a 9, that done.
Re: August by Muffinly	wilco 66.61.101.130	13-Sep-05/7:33 PM
mmm...not as good as the first one I read...not terrible, just doesn't make me jump up and say halle-fucking-luja (which really wouldn't be that hard right now cause I've got an 18 pack of High Life and the George Strait Box Set.
Re: June by Muffinly	wilco 66.61.101.130	13-Sep-05/7:31 PM
Once again, you could probably say this in about half the lines and it's actually be more effective.
Re: Radio Tele Libre Mille Collines by Muffinly	wilco 66.61.101.130	13-Sep-05/7:30 PM
Baxter, you know I don't speak Spanish. Seriusly, though, you've got some solid stuff here. I think you could do without the second stanza and cut the first down to about half the lines and this'll be pretty damn good.