Re: a comment on My addict by Heather Dee	zodiac 213.186.179.179	16-Sep-05/2:22 AM
I'm from Cold Mountain, NC. It sounds either like the word 'mere' or the word 'fir'. That is, 'round hirr.
Re: Seekers by Dovina	zodiac 213.186.179.179	16-Sep-05/2:19 AM
Is the church both siding and stucco? How hideous. I suppose you'll say, religion usually is.
Re: a comment on Rejuvenation by Dovina	zodiac 213.186.179.179	16-Sep-05/2:19 AM
Why not? Eyes attract males for purposes of fertilization. Flowers attract bees for purposes of fertilization. If you don't believe me, ask yourself, what part of the flower actually produces seeds? Is that really even part of the flower? What's all the rest for? Wisdom teeth are relics from times when people ate grass. Here in Jordan, where people actually do eat grass, most people retain their wisdom teeth and lose the rest. True story. Extra grass-chewing ability allows grass-eating humans to survive to fertility and reproduce. But that's nothing like the eye argument. PS: Note the spelling on argument. You've gone on too long with your vestigial 'e's, frankly.
Re: a comment on oh how far are we from wilderness by tianyi	tianyi 86.130.65.59	15-Sep-05/4:51 PM
Wow, thankyou very much!
Re: Emotionally Unavailable by horus8	tianyi 86.130.65.59	15-Sep-05/4:47 PM
yes
Re: oh how far are we from wilderness by tianyi	srh 58.178.23.218	15-Sep-05/2:58 PM
This is great. Really draw out a lovely slow rhythm in the second part. Nice, subtle, beautiful.
Re: Leaving Song by wilco	Caducus 172.201.113.199	15-Sep-05/9:30 AM
I know line 3 its so true.
Re: Creation by Quarton	Caducus 172.201.113.199	15-Sep-05/9:29 AM
Pretty good and technically sound it just seems a bit anonymous. Try and do one without the emphasis on rhyme it may be more punchy.
Re: Dale by INTRANSIT	Caducus 172.201.113.199	15-Sep-05/9:00 AM
its a freakin classic and normally what i liked a couple of years ago isnt the same now (which can be said of some readers to my work). This is still so haunting and ripping out the guts of a grandfather clock shows your emotive qualities spilling over - this poem made me like you as a human and writer.
Re: Seekers by Dovina	Caducus 172.201.113.199	15-Sep-05/8:57 AM
you dont need asymettrically its too effucsive with it but i like the comparisons of natures shape to our own.
Re: a comment on this has happened more than a few times by ay deee	ay deee 24.255.87.123	14-Sep-05/8:00 PM
and how is it insane, even if it is wrong?
Re: a comment on this has happened more than a few times by ay deee	ay deee 24.255.87.123	14-Sep-05/7:34 PM
i must be missing something i don't see anything wrong with approaching a situation from different perspectives simultaneously in real life or in art
Re: a comment on the birds are bugs by ay deee	ay deee 24.255.87.123	14-Sep-05/7:29 PM
more specific suggestions are always welcome but thank you for your vote
Re: a comment on the birds are bugs by ay deee	ay deee 24.255.87.123	14-Sep-05/7:28 PM
and thank you for your vote
Re: a comment on the birds are bugs by ay deee	ay deee 24.255.87.123	14-Sep-05/7:26 PM
i mostly like to give peeks into neat things they are cicadas but i'm not from around here the lack of punctuation is an aesthetic choice i would prompt another read if you are troubled by it and yes there are many and varied interpretations it just a peek of sorts
Re: a comment on the birds are bugs by ay deee	ay deee 24.255.87.123	14-Sep-05/7:21 PM
"they have like a voiliny sound to them" a qoute yalls dont worry bout that
Re: a comment on My addict by Heather Dee	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	14-Sep-05/6:33 PM
Maybe if your Chingy. I live in the south. I have not heard anyone say mirr or firr. So thirr.
Re: a comment on Leaving Song by wilco	wilco 66.61.101.130	14-Sep-05/3:14 PM
That's the idea
Re: Leaving Song by wilco	Dovina 24.52.236.153	14-Sep-05/3:13 PM
Funny - so incongruent it's funny.
Re: a comment on Seekers by Dovina	wilco 66.61.101.130	14-Sep-05/3:12 PM
Good riddance to bad rubbish...the club, I mean, not the poem...the poem was quite good...but I understand <sniff>.