Re: The United Face of Totally Grody by Shardik	nentwined 98.148.150.246	2-Jul-08/2:38 AM
ow. I couldn't read it. great job of "what the hell".
Re: We can all be free with our legs by daggatolar	nentwined 98.148.150.246	2-Jul-08/2:37 AM
strange. but I still don't know if I want you to go around with your legs open. what happened to good old crawling around with nothing but your arms as motive force?
Re: There can be only one by Shardik	nentwined 98.148.150.246	2-Jul-08/2:36 AM
definitely has something (situational plot). If you could inject a little more context and a little less highlander...
Re: Under a better bed wetter by Shardik	nentwined 98.148.150.246	2-Jul-08/2:35 AM
hilarious, but doesn't really do it for me as a poem. goes on a bit much, and while you get kudos on "lugubriously", ... eh. thanks for the cheer anyway :) I know you weren't going for "quality", but there's room for art in it anyway. Though one man's art is another's bed wetting, sure...
Re: FOR YOU!! by kristie24	nentwined 98.148.150.246	2-Jul-08/2:33 AM
definitely one for the pimple archives. rhymes/spelling/content ... hurt ...
Re: a comment on in this bus terminal of the future by nentwined	nentwined 98.148.150.246	2-Jul-08/2:31 AM
Thanks :D
Re: Falling Away by Holy Sinner	daggatolar 41.219.199.160	1-Jul-08/5:37 PM
simply break thru the wall and walk away into freedom, only that love can not be found outside of the flesh...and all we are not is not us to blame
Re: Purple Reign of Blood by Kamikaze	daggatolar 41.219.199.160	1-Jul-08/5:30 PM
good old rhyme 4 something child-like and curried with adult-chill
Re: ode to boa:w/thanks to the 60's rock group, BloodRock by malpaso	Kamikaze 75.20.182.48	30-Jun-08/3:17 PM
A dirge for modern life. This guy is nuts. I actually remember the song he's riffing on.
Re: in this bus terminal of the future by nentwined	Dan garcia-Black 69.237.237.147	30-Jun-08/8:31 AM
Even better on the 2nd read.
Re: a comment on in this bus terminal of the future by nentwined	Dovina 208.127.216.26	28-Jun-08/10:37 AM
SEARCH works for me today, STL but it works. Anti-grav is here now, a mere dimple in space-time, just have to think light, less chocolate and all. Cheers.
Re: Da Ghetto by <{Baba^Yaga}>	nentwined 98.148.150.246	27-Jun-08/7:29 PM
ouch.
Re: The Lion and the worm. by <{Baba^Yaga}>	nentwined 98.148.150.246	27-Jun-08/7:28 PM
... strange. yes, strange.
Re: If you pimp me I'll stay Walter by Shardik	nentwined 98.148.150.246	27-Jun-08/7:25 PM
ex-fix-i-ate pwnage. oh, shardik.
Re: The Fog And The Androids by Shardik	nentwined 98.148.150.246	27-Jun-08/7:24 PM
definitely lyric; and kind of fun. but not really interesting. I can imagine this set to music, though, and people singing along.
Re: Why I want to kill Opie by Bachus	nentwined 98.148.150.246	27-Jun-08/7:23 PM
meh.
Re: The folded ways your eyes cave by Shardik	nentwined 98.148.150.246	27-Jun-08/7:22 PM
Villanelles have definitely made me feel this way. Firefox doesn't know what a villanelle is. But it doesn't know what Firefox is, either, unless I capitalize it. I feel ... guided. 6 for fun.
Re: Falling Away by Holy Sinner	nentwined 98.148.150.246	27-Jun-08/6:55 PM
it's -> its two-by-fours (I think) ... typical drifting away poem. some nice imagery--the poem could benefit by focusing on that and making it more coherent.
Re: a comment on in this bus terminal of the future by nentwined	nentwined 98.148.150.246	27-Jun-08/2:01 PM
can has moar blood? :) VTOL is more just the direction of thrust; anti-grav I hope to be much more spectacular. :) FTL - faster than light (travel). Which teleportation generally qualifies as, but I was grasping. Glad it got a chuckle. resumption of SEARCH?
Re: The sky ending up by Prince of Void	Dovina 208.127.216.214	27-Jun-08/11:18 AM
Pessimists have the advantage of seldom becoming discouraged by a bad happening. Enjoy unhappiness, it seems quite comforting. I think you can make this more unhappy be cutting the "in"s in lines 6 and 7 and other such words that don't depress.