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The sky ending up

Member since 2002 · Posted 15 May 2008 · 1 comment

The sky ending up In all deserted streets Where I'm wandering along The coast of unhappiness For the meaning of lost In where I'm alone In the world of lost As the day's dying down deep down in the depth of what I used to regret when my heart started to get pathless it opens to where the colorless path is spread out to all horizons They don't fight back any more My teas will be wiped by morning breeze That's the dawn, lying on the ocean The way I'm heading to My spirit is high Flying in the eye of clouds, Joining the sky with the deserted streets

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[7] Dovina 27-Jun-08/11:18 AM Reply
Pessimists have the advantage of seldom becoming discouraged by a bad happening. Enjoy unhappiness, it seems quite comforting. I think you can make this more unhappy be cutting the "in"s in lines 6 and 7 and other such words that don't depress.