Re: I Got Mine Designed by Skamper	Dovina 208.127.216.214	27-Jun-08/10:46 AM
At least you're back and ranting erotically. I wish more were. "de-frost" is like putting Frost down. Hopefully you don't mean to; why not "defrost"?
Re: in this bus terminal of the future by nentwined	Dovina 208.127.216.214	27-Jun-08/10:39 AM
If an engine won't run, inject some of your own blood into its carburetor. Good try. I think the resumption of SEARCH would make a better try. As for anti-grav and VTOL, they look like results of the same technology. I don't know what FTL is. The last line is funny
Re: The Man Who Drooped by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	nentwined 98.148.150.246	26-Jun-08/8:51 PM
classic.
Re: sperladnik by malpaso	nentwined 98.148.150.246	26-Jun-08/8:44 PM
less drugs? different drugs? more drugs? I don't know! Aieeeeee!
Re: sperladnik: the sequel by malpaso	nentwined 98.148.150.246	26-Jun-08/8:40 PM
funny, but not funny enough. :)
Re: Moat Man by JMakStak	nentwined 98.148.150.246	26-Jun-08/8:39 PM
this has something, though I think you're going concrete as opposed to free verse? and I'm not really getting the concrete image except for a vague separation of things...
Re: Question by half.italian	nentwined 98.148.150.246	26-Jun-08/8:38 PM
plausible.
Re: In desperate need by outoftouch	nentwined 98.148.150.246	26-Jun-08/8:38 PM
"liking me for who it is I want to be." <-- an interesting line "I need you like a fat kid needs cake," <-- less so, unless that's the feel you're going for throughout
Re: untitled by outoftouch	nentwined 98.148.150.246	26-Jun-08/8:37 PM
"I know this sounds unbelievably cheesy, And extremely cliche," ding! :) No real offense intended, and nothing to do with your situation, just the poem--it's a pimple, through and through.
Re: Her tears by outoftouch	nentwined 98.148.150.246	26-Jun-08/8:36 PM
the tears aren't for him, really. and this poem isn't for anyone but the writer.
Re: not good enough by outoftouch	nentwined 98.148.150.246	26-Jun-08/8:34 PM
"she doesn't she that" -> "she doesn't see that" cant -> can't ... This belongs pretty perfectly in the pimple category. It's a common enough place/time/emotion, more for the writer of the poem than anyone else.
Re: Hardboiled Heart by T. Jonathron Remp	nentwined 98.148.150.246	26-Jun-08/8:33 PM
Could be good lyrics. The randomness of what you grasp at is the main detractor for me--I can't gel any particular image/meaning/point out of the poem, and that makes any possible insights ... less.
Re: Killer Gap by T. Jonathron Remp	nentwined 98.148.150.246	26-Jun-08/8:29 PM
The first stanza and three quarters really work, though I wouldn't expect them too. You're losing it for me where you break from the form and rhythm you've set up ((any form is tenuous and has a lot to prove about itself... and when you drop it, if that's not intrinsically meaningful, ...)) Interesting, though.
Re: I Got Mine Designed by Skamper	nentwined 98.148.150.246	26-Jun-08/8:27 PM
funny that. random with a hint of purpose (I smell porpoise). I'd like to know a little more about what you got designed... maybe. :) I'm possibly missing a lot, here.
Re: A rock by nisim2	nentwined 98.148.150.246	26-Jun-08/8:26 PM
The English of this piece is very awkward. Reads like a school assignment? Not sure you meant dolor or color (though both work about as well?) They end-rhymes (and near rhymes) feel very forced (and AABB tends to jump out as juvenile when reading something).
Re: If I Could by little_angel_maria	nentwined 98.148.150.246	24-Jun-08/12:09 PM
This is by Sandra Lewis Pringle.
Re: boy girl by little_angel_maria	nentwined 98.148.150.246	24-Jun-08/12:08 PM
This anonymously authored poem appears to be older than this poster.
Re: love 2 by little_angel_maria	nentwined 98.148.150.246	24-Jun-08/12:03 PM
Adding one word to a poem is not a significant change. This is "Realizing Love" by Richard Sheak.
Re: a comment on Reasons by little_angel_maria	some deleted user 98.163.88.36	23-Jun-08/5:05 PM
This poem is fake! All your poems are fake! You have a pathetic need for positive attention, but this positive attention doesn't even belong to you. It belongs to Thomas McGrath!
Re: a comment on Voice of the World by Dovina	Dovina 208.127.216.70	21-Jun-08/7:29 PM
Do you think that the laws and initial conditions that determined the properties of the universe are consistent with the existence of intellegent life?