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Moat Man (Free verse) by JMakStak Pull the bridge up
but
let me inside.
Don't ever let up
just
let me inside.
I am not safe
no, no
I am not safe.
So lock me up tight
sweetheart,
let me inside.
Up the ladder:
Sleeping Beauty
Down the ladder:
the edge of creation - spoken word
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Posted: June 11, 2008 11:26 PM PDT; Last modified: June 11, 2008 11:26 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.0474257 Overall Rank: 6916 Comments:
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nentwined @ 98.148.150.246
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26-Jun-08/8:39 PM
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this has something, though I think you're going concrete as opposed to free verse? and I'm not really getting the concrete image except for a vague separation of things...
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