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Falling Away (Free verse) by Holy Sinner I am bored with love
and it's passionless limbs
that drape over my bed
in a lethargic state of impotence
while wearing the same red heart
my soul picked up hitchhiking
off highway serendipity
Now here we are
alone in togetherness
trying to build dreams
with two by fours and glue,
but even a home
won't tie us together
when our hearts live alone
Poetic vows cliched
into nothingness
like all words do, eventually
and we allowed
our bodies to become
another pair of hollow shadows
that make love to a wall
instead of each other
and we wonder why
the roses are dying
Up the ladder:
Baggage (3rd ending)
Down the ladder:
The Little Girl
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.3333335
Posted: June 27, 2008 2:05 AM PDT; Last modified: June 27, 2008 2:05 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.1589375 Overall Rank: 5122 Comments:
simply break thru the wall and walk away into freedom, only that love can not be found outside of the flesh...and all we are not is not us to blame
Squatter love is like sex with a tetanus glove. Indeed. Hrmm... I'd say 7.5, but lets just round it to an eight.
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two-by-fours (I think)
...
typical drifting away poem. some nice imagery--the poem could benefit by focusing on that and making it more coherent.