Re: Going Away to Fight a War by wilco	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	9-Feb-06/9:14 PM
Hi wilco, I haven't seen you around much. Probably it's because I too have't been so possessed by this site lately. This is a good piece, and if you say it's country then it definitely fits. I can't imagine putting rock or reggae into it as I have a strong aversion for the two. You definitely have a knack for writing lyrics. Hats off to you.
Re: Perversions 8: The Reckoning by razorgrin	Glasseyez 204.49.132.59	9-Feb-06/9:12 PM
oh god the necrophelia one oh the humanity, 10
Re: Perversions 8: The Reckoning by razorgrin	Glasseyez 204.49.132.59	9-Feb-06/9:12 PM
oh god the negrophelia on oh humanity, 10
Re: Ode to necrophilia by Bobjim	Glasseyez 204.49.132.59	9-Feb-06/9:09 PM
Are you a vegetarian?
Re: The Call of Duty by waltfreakinwhitman	Glasseyez 204.49.132.59	9-Feb-06/9:03 PM
It is the worst shit I have ever read I give you a 10 and a lollipop maybe no scratch the lollipop
Re: You by sk8boardandpoems	Glasseyez 204.49.132.59	9-Feb-06/8:59 PM
A little more content, your quote unquote poems do seem more on the demented side like you have big issues with people leaving you and you want to kill them.........thats what i get from this
Re: No One by sk8boardandpoems	Glasseyez 204.49.132.59	9-Feb-06/8:54 PM
If you had something more than whining I would have given you a better score
Re: if only you could read my mind love by sk8boardandpoems	Glasseyez 204.49.132.59	9-Feb-06/8:50 PM
Crutch ha poor bastard! Girls don't think desperateness is attractive. I hope you didn't give this to her. 3 hey its better than the other two I read
Re: Mask by sk8boardandpoems	Glasseyez 204.49.132.59	9-Feb-06/8:45 PM
poop, its................poop
Re: sick and demented by sk8boardandpoems	Glasseyez 204.49.132.59	9-Feb-06/8:42 PM
Stick to skating
Re: Everything That You've Ever Wanted by drnick	drnick 24.176.22.254	9-Feb-06/8:28 PM
I've begun to notice that everyone else on here puts a lot more time and effort into their poems than I do(I usually spend an hour/poem), and I don't think it's fair to ask your advice on something I haven't really worked on myself. The stuff I write is just crap, I mean take this poem: how pathetic is my imagry...did you even know I was attemping to have some imagry?-It's that bad. You guys all write some amazing poetry, and I'm sorry for asking you all to do my work for me. I will now pledge to work harder on my writing, although I have little time with classes, so that I can produce work that is of substance. I thank you all for being so kind and generous with your advice.
Re: a comment on Lonely Road by drnick	drnick 24.176.22.254	9-Feb-06/8:27 PM
I completely agree, there's nothing special about this poem...I've begun to notice that everyone else on here puts a lot more time into their poems than I do(I usually spend an hour), and I don't think it's fair to ask your advice on something I haven't really worked on myself. The stuff I write is just crap, I mean take this poem: how pathetic is my imagry...did you even know I was attemping to have some imagry?-It's that bad. You guys all write some amazing poetry, and I'm sorry for asking you all to do my work for me. I will now pledge to work harder on my writing, although I have little time with classes, so that I can produce work that is of substance. I thank you all for being so kind and generous with your advice. I will post this message on my latest piece of shit so that the people I'm talking to are more likely to read it.
Re: a comment on Everything That You've Ever Wanted by drnick	drnick 24.176.22.254	9-Feb-06/8:13 PM
Yes, that is part of what I am saying. I take it a bit further, though, and say if all our wishes were made reality we'd find existance boring and intolerable.
Re: a comment on Going Away to Fight a War by wilco	wilco 24.92.74.122	9-Feb-06/7:55 PM
and homosexual Scientology loving movie stars.
Re: The Acorn Daisies by MacFrantic	god'swife 71.103.98.44	9-Feb-06/7:53 PM
The last two lines are excellent. I have to think about the rest. What's 'kindling homes'?
Re: Partying Blind by poetry/poem101	god'swife 71.103.98.44	9-Feb-06/7:38 PM
The stories are interesting. I can't believe that any little league would allow such retarded names for teams. If you made these up, make up better ones. If you didn't make these up, than you should make up better ones. Right now this is just a little too cumbersome. I like the authenticity of the voice. It reads as if you are speaking directly to me and that's good. Maybe you can think about seperating these memories. Let each stand alone. Even if it's just with roman numerals or something. I don't really like the one about the optometrist visits. it makes you a less sympathetic character. The title's good. you shouldn't annotate at the end. It's better to finish with a compelling image or statement. For example; 'for the first time in a long time I saw my father.' Maybe you should be writing a screenplay. Actors love playing tormented characters. Blindness makes for good analogies. One question, how do you use a computer?
Re: a comment on Everything That You've Ever Wanted by drnick	Dovina 69.175.32.104	9-Feb-06/7:37 PM
A life without fear is possible without eloping with some fantasy. But in saying that I define fear as mental distress concerning unpleasant posibilities such as dying or losing health or money.
Re: a comment on Going Away to Fight a War by wilco	Dovina 69.175.32.104	9-Feb-06/7:18 PM
For the same reason that living in California means that everything I write is inspired by fruit and nuts.
Re: a comment on My Father’s World by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	9-Feb-06/7:13 PM
Lines 7 and 8 are quotes, and I agree with alchemy – they should be in “”. Religion is interesting and wistful and nostalgic. To many people, it’s even important.
Re: a comment on Going Away to Fight a War by wilco	wilco 24.92.74.122	9-Feb-06/4:37 PM
Why do you always think that, because I'm from Tennessee, all my songs are country? ;)