Re: a comment on The Acorn Daisies by MacFrantic	MacFrantic 207.200.116.66	10-Feb-06/6:59 AM
Their not real, and thank you.
Re: writer's block by Zoetrope	Ranger 62.252.32.15	10-Feb-06/6:02 AM
Okay...although this is too long for me to read in one sitting (have a lecture shortly) I skim-read it and liked what I saw. I shall return later for a more detailed synopsis.
Re: My Father’s World by Dovina	Zoetrope 172.153.211.78	9-Feb-06/10:50 PM
"I proudly showed one too" is pretty good. "A canvas tarp on his shoulder heaved" is a little tortured though. There are a lot of things you could rhyme with leaves without flipping the "heaved" line. Would a working class guy who uses words like gumption know that unction means ointment? seems like a funny word to use.
Re: The Acorn Daisies by MacFrantic	Zoetrope 172.153.211.78	9-Feb-06/10:45 PM
Not sure I know what "acorn daisies" are, but this is pretty good. Like the last couple of lines, especially.
Re: Everything That You've Ever Wanted by drnick	Zoetrope 172.153.211.78	9-Feb-06/10:40 PM
don't be so hard on yourself--the imagery isn't bad. Neither is the poem.
Re: Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	9-Feb-06/10:10 PM
Dovina, I think I have read this earlier. I might not have appreciated this much...more because I am not familiar with the American setting. but now it makes more sense to me. It is written from the heart and gives a sense of wanting it back. I think I owe you a 10 for this.... and I'm glad I didn't vote earlier.
Re: My testament to free speech by Glasseyez	some deleted user 204.49.132.59	9-Feb-06/10:08 PM
Our views could compare 9
Re: Memoirs of a Greasyslut the rest of the story by Glasseyez	some deleted user 204.49.132.59	9-Feb-06/10:05 PM
hahaha funny
Re: Static by wilco	drnick 24.176.22.254	9-Feb-06/10:00 PM
This makes me salivate it's so good. I'd like to point out what I really like about this, but it would be every single line. I try very hard not to give out 10s, but this is perfect. "And the best radio station in town is nothing but static And the heartbreaking hum of the road is soft and erratic." -genius.
Re: Do Something by Miggy	drnick 24.176.22.254	9-Feb-06/9:55 PM
Hey, I think you might be getting it...this could be a lot better, but the SUBJECT is a massive improvement. Thus I will give you a 5.
Re: Dear Dad, Dear Mom, Dear Me by Miggy	drnick 24.176.22.254	9-Feb-06/9:49 PM
Wow...this is really bad. Come on, man, I know you're better than this. These sound like country-pop lyrics, and that music is for the musically retarded. Try to not be so obvious with what you're talking about, or say something profound if you do want to be direct.
Re: The Book of Images by Dovina	Glasseyez 204.49.132.59	9-Feb-06/9:38 PM
I really like this one
Re: The Perigenetic Prayer by ALChemy	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	9-Feb-06/9:37 PM
Alchemy, I didn't quite fit in with the first verse. It was rather deceptive. I thought you were praying to God your Father, and that's when I got into the second verse. It go me off balance suddenly or rather off guard. It's written well though, if it's to your parents.
Re: Racism 4 by Dovina	Glasseyez 204.49.132.59	9-Feb-06/9:32 PM
Well said, well put
Re: My Father’s World by Dovina	Glasseyez 204.49.132.59	9-Feb-06/9:30 PM
This is nice I like the way you write
Re: Faith on a cross by Caducus	Glasseyez 204.49.132.59	9-Feb-06/9:27 PM
That was good I like the visuals I get from this
Re: a comment on Going Away to Fight a War by wilco	Dovina 69.175.32.104	9-Feb-06/9:27 PM
If I become one, I'll surely tell.
Re: A Short Letter by Ranger	Glasseyez 204.49.132.59	9-Feb-06/9:23 PM
9
Re: Blackbird & the Everlasting Dream by Ranger	Glasseyez 204.49.132.59	9-Feb-06/9:19 PM
well done
Re: I Usually Wear Pants by razorgrin	Glasseyez 204.49.132.59	9-Feb-06/9:16 PM
Im sorry, but if I knew you I would mention it really