Re: a comment on To Athena by cleverdevice	Ranger 86.131.48.111	16-Jul-06/11:56 PM
Awesome, I'm envious of anyone soaking up the summer sun - as opposed to soaking up the UV rays of Tesco lighting. You should get in touch with some of the others though, we're footballing most weeks and your presence (not to mention that fine 'keeping) would be a marvellous addition. Are you on MySpace.com? That's as good a way as any of keeping up to date. Plus, it's going to take over the world in the future and I recommend being on the winning side...
Re: a comment on I'm Learning To Drive by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 209.23.202.76	16-Jul-06/11:42 PM
What I can't understand is why I didn't read it as sexual and you did. What, did we swap brains that day or something?
Re: The Song of Summer Youth (II) by cleverdevice	CherokeeRoseLoggins 67.140.224.214	16-Jul-06/11:16 PM
It needs a few more commas at the end of some of the verses, but other than that, a very good read and an excellent write.
Re: a comment on I'm Learning To Drive by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 202.164.138.155	16-Jul-06/6:41 PM
D , you have a way of saying things without actually saying them. The stabs were well aimed and right on target. ;-) Thanks for the look up on this poem again.
Re: I'm Learning To Drive by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 12.72.35.62	16-Jul-06/5:58 PM
My comment on the deleted one was a bit snide: “I'm sorry you said, near the end, that the car has dual controls. Up to there I imagined you on his lap in a fine rainy day romp along an Indian lane.” Striving this time to inflict wounds of a friend, please take a few goddess stabs at an angel: Trees sway. The heavens storm. I’m sitting at the wheel, driving to drum beats of thunder while the instructor watches. ‘Left indicator, brake a little,’ he commands… I clutch and find first gear, move on slowly… there’s a hump ahead clutch again and shift to two, accelerate a bit, almost confident, I shift to three and speed on. I shift to the fourth, speed away, confident now, I forget he’s there. I thrill at being in control, transferred to a world of my own, till I come to a junction; the rain’s pouring, and I don’t know how to stop. My instructor suddenly presses the brakes.. and then I realize he’s got the controls on his side too, and I’m saved in the nick of time. Lord, how could I forget You’re in control of my life?
Re: August 23, 1944 - 102 miles west of Paris by Ranger	cleverdevice 86.140.151.122	16-Jul-06/8:56 AM
Nice work bro. Made me feel I was there, burning documents that implicated my superiors roles in 'The Final Solution'. No seriously, awesome stuff. The Falaise Gap was one of the most shocking and horrific scenes in all the war. This evokes what I imagine it would have been like once it was eventually quiet.
Re: a comment on To Athena by cleverdevice	cleverdevice 86.140.151.122	16-Jul-06/8:33 AM
I am indeed back in the Shire, soaking up the rays. Its good to be back you know.
Re: I'm Learning To Drive by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 202.164.138.155	16-Jul-06/8:22 AM
To those who have read and critiqued this poem...... sorry, but I accidently deleted this poem while trying to edit it.
Re: ENIGMA, WONDER, BEASTLINESS AND FURY by Gopakumar	amanda_dcosta 202.164.140.187	15-Jul-06/7:01 PM
First of all... welcome to poemranker Gopakumar. Hope you enjoy this site and all the critiques that you'll come across. To begin with this piece.... I don't fancy this sort of repetitive style much. However, I'll set that aside and say, that you've got an idea of what you want to write and it's presentation is fairly good.
Re: forever it was you by the indign	amanda_dcosta 202.164.140.187	15-Jul-06/6:54 PM
Sounds very sweet and so in love. But I can't understand , if you were so in love how come you never did anything to prove it to her. and you've resigned yourself to that fate.... Think about it...it'slike you've never really done anything about it but watch her all the time.... maybe she needed more from you.
Re: PHOTO by madamefrufru	amanda_dcosta 202.164.140.187	15-Jul-06/3:48 AM
This I must admit is much better than your previous post. This has character and some good phrases. It is a good read.
Re: Memories of modernism by madamefrufru	amanda_dcosta 202.164.140.187	15-Jul-06/3:44 AM
This reads more like a summary-in-a-nut-shell piece. Or in fact it doesn't read much like a poem. You've got what you want to present, but in my opinion, your presentation needs fixing.
Re: forever it was you by the indign	madamefrufru 89.240.138.243	15-Jul-06/2:39 AM
An obvious poem but It doesnt mean I didnt enjoy it. nice
Re: a comment on of Arabia by ecargo	ALChemy 209.23.202.76	14-Jul-06/9:58 PM
She just got inducted into the Black Entertainment hall of fame. On a less happy note BET just cancelled it's most important contribution to society. I speak of none other than the unforgetable, undeniably uncensored "BET Uncut" Featuring thong donned beauties gyrating to such hits as "Werk Dat Twerk Dat" "What's that thing smell like?" "Booty Poppin'" and "I's a Pimp, You's A Trick". We will miss you "Uncut". Whatever will we do Thursday through Saturday at 3am to replace you?
Re: a comment on Selkie (An Antique of Lurid Partes - w/Girl on Girl Action!) by ecargo	ALChemy 209.23.202.76	14-Jul-06/9:33 PM
It's more like a double entendre in which one entendre prematurely ejaculates into the other entendre.
Re: up upon by the indign	amanda_dcosta 202.164.140.187	14-Jul-06/6:28 PM
Cool.
Re: To Athena by cleverdevice	amanda_dcosta 202.164.140.187	14-Jul-06/6:23 PM
Wonderfully worded.
Re: a comment on Selkie (An Antique of Lurid Partes - w/Girl on Girl Action!) by ecargo	Ranger 86.137.108.79	14-Jul-06/3:13 PM
I'd accuse you of dabbling in the dark arts of double entendres, but really that was barely a single entendre...
Re: a comment on The Lonesome Loser by Dovina	Dovina 70.38.78.229	14-Jul-06/3:09 PM
Then stop being so darned irresistable.
Re: To Athena by cleverdevice	Ranger 86.137.108.79	14-Jul-06/3:09 PM
DUDE! The triumphant return! How the devil are you? Last I heard you'd arrived home from someplace in India and were residing in the cold, damp North - whatever possessed you to lurch off there? And, more importantly, are you back in the vicinity of the Shire now? Typo last line: - embrace. Good to see you back