Re: Get Over It by drnick	amanda_dcosta 202.164.138.155	18-Jul-06/5:44 AM
The rhyming is good... and also the last lines. This time I see that you have a title for your poem.
Re: ENIGMA, WONDER, BEASTLINESS AND FURY by Gopakumar	Dovina 12.72.36.192	17-Jul-06/2:48 PM
Much too repeatative to carry what little interest there is. These are commonly heard statements that might be made interesting if couched in something unique.
Re: Intro by MacFrantic	Dovina 12.72.36.192	17-Jul-06/2:42 PM
Hope on - rocks in your barrel or not makes no difference. And the logic isn't.
Re: Get Over It by drnick	Dovina 12.72.36.192	17-Jul-06/2:38 PM
I like the rhyme, the brevity, and her eye-liner. What I don't get is whether the sloppy hair is yours or hers. Doesn't matter, I suppose, a fad is a silly fad.
Re: a comment on The Clock and the Storm by cleverdevice	Dovina 12.72.36.192	17-Jul-06/2:34 PM
Hey, just fix the grammar and spelling, which are atrocious in places. Then we can talk about rhyme, Kipling, all that poeteic stuff.
Re: Get Over It by drnick	Ranger 86.140.69.253	17-Jul-06/2:22 PM
One of the best I've read for months. Catchy, great rhyming, and an excellent punch at the end. Favourited.
Re: a comment on The Clock and the Storm by cleverdevice	Ranger 86.140.69.253	17-Jul-06/2:03 PM
It would be easier than re-rhyming the fucker to make it write. Trust me.
Re: a comment on To Athena by cleverdevice	Ranger 86.140.69.253	17-Jul-06/2:02 PM
I've gone 2 years without knowing my uni email, so Facebook is out of the question. I might cave in to the pressure and get with it next year, but no promises. We'll fix up a proper game soon, hitch a lift with one of the lads from nearer you.
Re: Tribute by creepshow	CherokeeRoseLoggins 67.140.224.214	17-Jul-06/12:03 PM
Sounds like death itself. The demons perhaps? I could descride either really. Final death is of rot, and this reminds me of some of those movie called The Walking Dead.
Re: Intro by MacFrantic	CherokeeRoseLoggins 67.140.224.214	17-Jul-06/11:43 AM
If only rocks could talk, for if walls could talk, what stories they could tell. LOL As an artist, I can see where rocks could have stories to tell, as like dead trees. So yeah, they could be poetry. You just made them so. LOL
Re: ENIGMA, WONDER, BEASTLINESS AND FURY by Gopakumar	CherokeeRoseLoggins 67.140.224.214	17-Jul-06/11:34 AM
A good concept, and with very good construction. So much truth in what you have written here. "beastliness of man," the cause of it all to start with. And I am not refering to the gender, but man, as in a whole, the human race. And the fury of nature, I guess because I am 3/4 Native American, or perhaps others may believe the same, but I do believe nature gets angry and lashes out.
Re: I hate making titles by drnick	CherokeeRoseLoggins 67.140.224.214	17-Jul-06/11:21 AM
Sorry for the typo, it was to say here, not ehre.
Re: I hate making titles by drnick	CherokeeRoseLoggins 67.140.224.214	17-Jul-06/11:20 AM
Was this suppose to be about lightning? Because that is the picture that formed in my mind while reading this. Sounds like the way lightning does around ehre in real bad storms. If so, then this is a good write. But I do agree with Ranger as for the last two lines; To answer all, The crackling calls.
Re: Intro by MacFrantic	amanda_dcosta 202.164.138.155	17-Jul-06/4:17 AM
Cool.
Re: a comment on I'm Learning To Drive by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 202.164.138.155	17-Jul-06/3:59 AM
Your brain ain't where it should be. ;-)
Re: Go Figure by MacFrantic	D. $ Fontera 71.208.105.201	17-Jul-06/2:34 AM
oh poemranker, so easily swayed, no way this is #1, and I wrote it.
Re: a comment on The Clock and the Storm by cleverdevice	cleverdevice 86.140.151.122	17-Jul-06/2:30 AM
I'm not re-writing the fucker just to make it rhyme!
Re: a comment on To Athena by cleverdevice	cleverdevice 86.140.151.122	17-Jul-06/2:19 AM
I hate to put you wrong, but clearly Facebook.com is the only place to be. I'll see what I can do for football, but being skint the train fair is a little tricky.
Re: Intro by MacFrantic	Ranger 86.131.48.111	17-Jul-06/12:11 AM
Ha!
Re: The Clock and the Storm by cleverdevice	Ranger 86.131.48.111	17-Jul-06/12:09 AM
This is good but I'd have preferred it if either it had been written freely without constraining yourself to the 4-line stanzas - something like: Daring to speak, the house groans Memories of past battles The trees in the field, brushed aside Cowed by screams of anger... ...or retain the stanzas but make it rhyme, Kipling-style. Then it would be superb, because you've got the content almost spot on. Just a few less words in places, not that I'm in a position to complain about people being wordy ;-)