Re: weather poem part 9: song for gloria by nypoet22	Dovina 12.72.45.68	10-Sep-06/6:34 PM
I wonder why you present these parts from the last, working toward the first, and why they are written in different styles, united as you say, by the theme of weather. All of them, up to this point, have some good lines, but I believe I'd do better in following your theme if the intro part were given first.
Re: a comment on The Natural Course of Fear by half.italian	Dovina 12.72.45.68	10-Sep-06/6:24 PM
Thanks. For that I raise your vote. If you say my new hairstyle is attractive, I'll raise it again.
Re: weather poem part 10: reprise by nypoet22	ecargo 63.22.89.248	10-Sep-06/6:18 PM
"fan-blown dark" is my favorite line. The "thrust and parry" of tongues, like a duel, is a little overused, IMO, but I do like the parallel with the fan blades cuting through air and silence and the "cuts she had suffered" adds a further touch of connectedness. The last line kind of loses me--I think I get why you went that way, but it seems like a bit of overblown dialect. Still, nice cohesiveness of imagery in this. Not sure I get how your multi-part poem fits together yet. Will be interesting to see all the pieces assembled.
Re: Beg Me Do by D. $ Fontera	ecargo 63.22.89.248	10-Sep-06/6:14 PM
I like the image of the map of fears and jealousy, tracing emotion like some kind of city subway map, and the image of sin commemorated as if it was some kind of statue. But in something so short, the repetition of lines doesn't really work for me--it seems like it needs more flesh or filling or something to make it more real and more complete. Still, interesting image of emotion made somehow tangible.
Re: Flour by MacFrantic	half.italian 70.36.242.152	10-Sep-06/5:08 PM
I love it. But at the same time the punctuation pisses me off. I don't think it adds anything more than a few characters in length.
Re: a comment on The Natural Course of Fear by half.italian	half.italian 70.36.242.152	10-Sep-06/5:03 PM
Yours are not plain at all. They have beautiful imagery.
Re: a comment on The Natural Course of Fear by half.italian	Dovina 12.72.42.199	10-Sep-06/4:57 PM
It's probably just me. I don't do well with a lot of abstraction. As you can see, mine are mostly plain.
Re: a comment on The Natural Course of Fear by half.italian	half.italian 70.36.242.152	10-Sep-06/4:36 PM
Point taken. I'll try a few with a bit less abstraction.
Re: The Natural Course of Fear by half.italian	Dovina 12.72.42.199	10-Sep-06/4:22 PM
Skeins of yarn are not parallel. Skeins of birds do not run up and down. It must be a sequence of events which run up and down,as opposed to something. ????
Re: a comment on Revaluations by Beyond_Dreams	Beyond_Dreams 24.180.184.126	10-Sep-06/4:02 PM
Britt I have one word for you, Lame.
Re: My Prayer by amanda_dcosta	Ranger 86.142.242.182	10-Sep-06/1:17 PM
Sweet, but it could do with something other than 'amazing grace'. Other than that, nice :-)
Re: The Natural Course of Fear by half.italian	Ranger 86.142.242.182	10-Sep-06/1:00 PM
Curse of the typos strikes - 'raspberry'. Love the last line, although as an Englishman I, of course, don't feel fear ;-)
Re: a comment on Once they were gliders. by half.italian	half.italian 70.36.242.152	10-Sep-06/10:43 AM
Its just about cars getting old and decrepit. The lucky ones will get repaired. Take what you want from it.
Re: Once they were gliders. by half.italian	amanda_dcosta 202.164.139.228	10-Sep-06/8:51 AM
What is this about? Maybe I am too tired... or this has no meaning. If the latter, kindly excuse me.
Re: Toe Jam Poem by EDNA by Edna Sweetlove	Ulterius 82.46.97.41	10-Sep-06/6:37 AM
In order to fulfil your wish, Edna, I am happy to oblige. What a piece of trash. :)
Re: With Old Light by Ranger	Wakeboarder20 71.227.248.140	9-Sep-06/10:27 PM
I think I'm a sucker for good imagery. Very well done.
Re: Visiting My Heart by drnick	Wakeboarder20 71.227.248.140	9-Sep-06/10:20 PM
Amazing imagery. Some of the best I've read in a poem. Very well written.
Re: a comment on Products of Pacifisim by Nuit	Ranger 86.140.66.234	9-Sep-06/10:20 PM
You don't mention religious wars, but you seem to be saying that godless pacifism is a blight on the world, which would imply that you think religious activism is a good thing. 'Plastic pacifism' = bad. Evolution and logic (from 'warped pride') = bad. So presumably the oppoosite of those, religious activism, equals good. What do i take from '10000 years of spiritual philosophy'? Well I don't think you've read much Western philosophy. Ten thousand years? Even the semitic philosophy only goes back, what, six thousand? And I don't know if that can be classed as Western. Not in origin, anyway. Ultimately, with your above comment, this seems to be you saying that ideology is empty and soulless because it encourages inactivity. Correct me if I'm wrong, but you don't need to tell me how much of a gargantuan dunce I am. I already know.
Re: Once they were gliders. by half.italian	Ranger 86.140.66.234	9-Sep-06/10:05 PM
Pretty cool, I'll have to come back to this later for a proper read of it :-)
Re: a comment on weather poem part 9: song for gloria by nypoet22	Ranger 86.140.66.234	9-Sep-06/10:04 PM
I noticed that most of yours started with the same line (which I thought was a top opening line) so I was quite surprised when this one didn't. Makes you wonder how people start conversations in countries where the weather's the same all year round, really.