Re: Once they were gliders. by half.italian	Dovina 12.72.43.135	9-Sep-06/4:41 PM
On first read I knew what this meant. Now after three reads I have no idea.
Re: Toe Jam Poem by EDNA by Edna Sweetlove	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.213.149	9-Sep-06/4:30 PM
This is total crap. I must be out of it. 0/10. Come on folks, help make it the worst poem here - I know there's a lot of competition but try and help me!
Re: End of day poem by ecargo	half.italian 70.36.242.152	9-Sep-06/2:59 PM
The stanzas confused me a bit, but the words are beautiful. Wow.
Re: Products of Pacifisim by Nuit	half.italian 70.36.242.152	9-Sep-06/2:46 PM
Second lunatic here... Too in your face. A bit of mystery might help.
Re: With Old Light by Ranger	nypoet22 70.149.108.201	9-Sep-06/1:55 PM
i love the way you construct the stanzas; it feels very natural as endrhymes go. i do agree with your own comment about a dearth of metaphor, but that doesn't detract much.
Re: a comment on Flour by MacFrantic	nypoet22 70.149.108.201	9-Sep-06/1:51 PM
i like the funky punctuation. it changes the way i read, and i think the meaning as well.
Re: a comment on Everything by RION12	nypoet22 70.149.108.201	9-Sep-06/1:40 PM
maybe it should be.
Re: Fat girls Who Wear Short Skirts During Winter Quarter by DurtKL	nypoet22 70.149.108.201	9-Sep-06/1:36 PM
i somehow have the sense that i've seen this form before. or maybe it's just a bit similar to other forms. in any case the repetition works very well. the topic is a little on the cutesy side, but it's blunt, tight and well-addressed. one may criticize the poem as insensitive to the issues dealt with by the obese, but anyone who can't figure out the point probably needs hooked on phonics.
Re: a comment on Products of Pacifisim by Nuit	Nuit 62.252.32.15	9-Sep-06/1:08 PM
well your a bit stupid then arent you. What do you take from the words 'Spritual philosophy', I dont even mention religion or religious wars for that matter. Besides, people make war for more than just faith. Im talking about the vanity of an idealistic western socity thats butchering the planet and playing god.
Re: a comment on weather poem part 9: song for gloria by nypoet22	nypoet22 70.149.108.201	9-Sep-06/1:07 PM
it's a long and as yet incomplete series of poems. they vary in form and content, but are all connected with some aspect of weather, which i think is the foreground of most small talk. most of the poems start with the same line as well, this being one of the exceptions.
Re: a comment on Epistemology (2nd draft) by Ranger	Ranger 86.140.69.193	9-Sep-06/12:56 PM
Thanks, but in hindsight this poem, and virtually everything I said in the comments, is a monstrous embarassment for me. It wasn't particularly bright, and neither was I :-( I only keep it as a record of how I've improved.
Re: a comment on Hailing Miriam by Ranger	Ranger 86.140.69.193	9-Sep-06/12:53 PM
Thank you :-) I don't think anyone's yet told me they picked up one the history (but I wrote it more than half an hour ago, so my memory isn't going to be that reliable a guide...) You got the Miriam/Mary bit?
Re: a comment on Exposing Anne Frank by Caducus	Ranger 86.140.69.193	9-Sep-06/12:38 PM
What makes you ask that?
Re: Products of Pacifisim by Nuit	Ranger 86.140.69.193	9-Sep-06/12:33 PM
So are you saying that religious wars make for a more interesting life? That's what I'm taking from this poem.
Re: weather poem part 9: song for gloria by nypoet22	Ranger 86.140.69.193	9-Sep-06/12:31 PM
The story in here is good - from experience (partly/entirely)? I tend to find that lyrics are difficult to rate in purely written form; their effectiveness is substantially down to the music involved. The following song is the ultimate example of it - average poetry, but utterly stunning when set to music: http://www.lyricscafe.com/p/porcupine_tree/061.htm (beware popups...) for the lyrics, if you can download it, the band is Porcupine Tree and the song is Heartattack In A Layby. **shameless plug over** What's the deal with the title - 'weather poem'?
Re: Hailing Miriam by Ranger	nypoet22 70.149.108.201	9-Sep-06/5:15 AM
i wonder how many readers understand the historical significance here. this is very well thought out. my suggestion would be to have liner notes like eliot, explaining the references.
Re: Epistemology (2nd draft) by Ranger	nypoet22 70.149.108.201	9-Sep-06/5:12 AM
overall i like this.
Re: Jesus by Sing4Jesus!	nypoet22 70.149.108.201	9-Sep-06/4:25 AM
umm, ok.
Re: my brother's by joey	nypoet22 70.149.108.201	9-Sep-06/4:20 AM
repost this in "limerick"
Re: Alone by T'ien	nypoet22 70.149.108.201	9-Sep-06/4:18 AM
you could have done SO much more with this.