-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
replying on Punk Rock Christmas by unknown^user
12 Aug 2004, 4:10 AM
Don't even know what a clarkie is!? Obviously you're a total n00b when is comes to drugs. And yes, of course you can smoke an E n00b.
I like the repition at the end, adds power. A little choppy, but overall a very nice concept. Stanza 4 is a tad confusing if you were looking for a revision place I might go there. Overall, I like it!
I'm a nigger, except I know how to speak clearly,
and dress properly, and I don't care about wearing heavy jewelery, or impressing my friends, and I think if more niggers toned it down like me? the world could finally get jiggy with it, and throw up a holla "west-side" from da crib. word down.
Yes, and I think if they learned how to speak clearly, and dress like gentlemen -- that would help too.
Mold bulging, is a clap full of cheer
That's kind of a random question. But no, sorry, it's actually the only residential tower in the business district of Downtown Tucson. I work in the suburbs though, if that helps.
And not to try to be overly picky, but I just hate to see that same mistake: contractions are always on the letter that you cut out (i.e. - can't, aren't, don't, etc.)
Were you afraid to fall in love with a girl unworthy?
And by the way - your from the suburbs are'nt you?
You know - the newness of a relationship,before you screw it up
with words or actions - the start of love is always the sweetest
part you remember.A young faultless couple ...an ideal.
I like a few individual lines in this, especially "To steal dots and mimic lines."
I assume "down under" refers to "inside," but I can't help seeing it as a sexual reference in this context.
I really don't understand a lot of the language in this. What is/are "the recent new of guiltless lovers?"
What the hell is a clarkie?Can you smoke ecstacy?I usaully stick
it up my anus and let it disolve right into my bloodstream.Oh by the way your poem was'nt bad or really good either but still better than godswife's best. -7-
I would be interested in knowing if this was the intent of the piece... and if it was, are there any allusions I am missing besides the ending?
Very descriptive. I love it. Good luck in your endeavors, we all need it.
cool i get the dot
-10-
very good
i feel that the racial argument was utterly retarted
at no point in your work did you make any racial statements or stereotypes.
people need to undrstand that there is a difference between black people and niggers
niggers harbor hatred toward the white man because of the past, they also down white people because they think that we are always trying to supress them WHICH IS NOT THE CASE WITH most WHITE PEOPLE
(i wont go into my own personal beliefs)
if all black people would just lighten up and try not to be so god damn touchy about the past we wouldnt have to deal with all this P.C bullshit
HA, HA, HA, HA,SON PEOPLE GROW THROUGH EXPERIENCE IF
THEY MEET LIFE HONESTLY AND COURAGEOUSLY. THIS IS HOW CHARACTER IS BUILT.I have always learned from EXPERIENCE THAT THE GREATER PART OF OUR HAPPINESS OR MISERY DEPENDS UPON OUR DISPOSITIONS, AND NOT UPON OUR
CIRCUMSTANCES.I'AM HAVING A GOOD TIME PLAYING WITH YOU
ON THIS MATTER, BUT YOU'RE TAKING IT TO SERIOUS.SO I'AM GOING TO LEAVE IT ALONG, BUT i hav'nt been a negro
since back in the 70's (smile)
BTW, if you hadn't noticed, I awarded zodiac with the shitwig to match his embrowned asshat... Not you, you fuckin nimrod. And also, none of the three terms mentioned-- shitwig, embrowned, & asshat-- have any racial undercurrent what-so-ever. But you managed to twist it all around in order to appear oppressed. Maybe your crying out for some attention eh?
So malcom, what lecture do you have for me next?
SDreamer.
dear "I have a degree from some school maybe, maybe not, but that's not really relevant anyway, because I have voted on 3077 poems, so that gives me the right to talk to you like you are an idiot"
Look overly sensitive freak that continues to respond to me, because he's a freakin idiot. If you think insulting people on the internet is fun, your life must not be going all that well for you, you know why? Because people who have nice jobs and healthy relationships don't respond to 3077 posts, do you know why, because they have a life, which you obviously do not, I mean you are bordering on freak, to brag about responding to 3077 poems.
The funny thing is I think that was the one thing you said which you were serious about, because it had a bit of a superiority, self-righteous air to the whole sentence.
âAs of today I have read and voted on 3077 posts on this site, so I guess I'm adequately qualified to say what kind of repetitive self-obsessed muck is perpetrated every day here, while you're not.â ---everyone this person is a loser.
You know I may be self righteous, I might be dim, I may be gay, but yet you continue to come back in a pathetic attempt to one up my insults to you which means that you my really cool pseudonymed friend are simply one step above me, a lowly cat, which doesn't say much does it?
three licks and a coughed up ball of hair to you,
cat