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To you (Free verse) by freelancejoker
Since the very beginning, I somehow knew that you were the one. Cannot explain the excitement I got, Nor the butterflies in my gut, But it is something, That provided the link. I didn't know what. Funny, Really. As you approached me, And said, "Hi, I'm Y" I can feel my heart pounding, And my lungs exploding. This electrifying experience, Left me in a deep trance, What exactly is this I'm feeling? You went on to intro yourself, And I felt, what the hell! Why can't I be myself? I took a glance at your dimply face, My heart raced. I couldn't control the pace, Or my awkward ways. I was in a daze, And at you, I could only gaze. "Is there something?" You broke the silence and my stare. I shyly turned away, No way could I dare, To steal a second glare. "Its nothing" YOu probed and said "There must be something" You gave me such a scare, You seemed to know what I wanted to declare, and what my heart yearned to bare. What a great opportunity, But I went gritt-witty! A thousand words in my mouth, But I didn't utter a sound. Tongue tied, Lips tight, How I wished to hide, In a hole so wide. You smiled, like you understood my thoughts. That beautiful smile, Made it all worthwhile. I went out of sorts, My body cramped in knots, I was simply dazzled, My heart was weathered. "Sre you ok?" I heard you say "How's the day?" "A beautiful sunny day!" Words within words, A profound approach. You smirked, Your shoulders you shirked. "Ahh yes a beautiful day.." Finally our eyes met, On you I was set. Oh cast me a fisherman's net, For it's you I want to catch. This is outta this earth, Not felt so since my birth. I knew I knew... This must be love...

Up the ladder: Owain Glyndwr
Down the ladder: 10-72

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Arithmetic Mean: 8.142858
Weighted score: 5.8452444
Overall Rank: 1590
Posted: August 6, 2004 10:50 PM PDT; Last modified: August 6, 2004 10:50 PM PDT
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[7] New Life Drug @ 69.106.227.126 | 7-Aug-04/12:30 AM | Reply
until you get your heart broken and say "what was i THINKING!???!" sorry..hope it works out
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.113.159 | 7-Aug-04/2:22 AM | Reply
Soggier than an overly turgid hump-loaf.
[10] ForgottenSoul17 @ 216.76.239.36 | 7-Aug-04/7:41 AM | Reply
Wow .. I give it a 10 ^__^
[10] bwickl11 @ 67.119.227.58 | 11-Aug-04/5:44 PM | Reply
Very descriptive. I love it. Good luck in your endeavors, we all need it.
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