poemranker ::Punk Rock Christmas by unknown^user

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Punk Rock Christmas

by unknown^user

Member since 2004 · Posted 9 Aug 2004 · 10 comments

Do you believe in magic? because I believe in everyone And everyone is here but the words won’t make sentences until I'm done. Just leave your worries at the door I'll just wait here And take your fucking shoes off too because I won't look you in the eyes until you do. We all live in houses in a joking kind of way I'm at home everyday. We'll sit on the porch in silence in colorful aluminum lawn chairs and watch the kids grow. Do you believe in karma? because I believe in you whatever it is you do. And I'm no fucking raver but let's talk about nothing and watch ourselves grow.

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[n/a] massangel62 9-Aug-04/11:35 PM Reply
like you think your poem is the best? there are a lot of poems in here that people write that are way better than yours or mine put together. i just write cause i like to, it may not make sense to you but it makes sense to me and thats all that matters. i never said that i'm a real poet or that mine are any good, but your not any better. look at the language you use in your writing. your not even worth voting on.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › massangel62 10-Aug-04/6:57 AM Reply
You raving frankfurter of idiocy. For pity's sake what's your problem? This is poemeranker. A site for ranking poemes. And if you post your poemes on a site for ranking poemes, then presumably you want your poemes to be ranked? Presumably you want other people to read the work you have smeared into the public domain and give you their honest opinion of it? Isn't that what you want? No. You just want people to mindlessly praise everything you do. You grotesque urchin.
[n/a] unknown^user › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 10-Aug-04/8:44 AM Reply
Well put.
The faceless anonymity of the Internet, and this community specifically, provide us with the opportunity for receiving honest, unbiased, and sometimes harsh constructive criticism. I consider this a blessing and is why I come back. I would ask that comments such as the previous not be posted publicly so as not to discourage the more shy who might otherwise have something to add, but hesitate for fear of reprisal from users whom they would criticize. If you feel a need to vent, do so through poetry, that's what it's there for.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › unknown^user 10-Aug-04/9:01 AM Reply
"I would ask that comments such as the previous not be posted publicly so as not to discourage the more shy who might otherwise have something to add, but hesitate for fear of reprisal from users whom they would criticize."

There are too many negations in that sentence. May I not be disallowed from suggesting the following, less daft alternative?

"Comments such as the previous may discourage shy users from contributing."
[n/a] unknown^user › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 10-Aug-04/12:06 PM Reply
Touché! Reads like the warning on a side mirror though.
[6] Dovina 10-Aug-04/8:10 AM Reply
When you say "fucking shoes" it implies some angst with the shod, and "no fucking raver" some reason to rave, but since you show none, the poem would be stronger without these. I can't relate poem to title without stretching my karma.
[n/a] unknown^user › Dovina 10-Aug-04/8:36 AM Reply
In this instance, "raver" implies an individual who attends raves. They ironically have the reputation for being over-friendly, as is one of the effects of the drug ecstasy.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › unknown^user 10-Aug-04/9:05 AM Reply
I once smoked a whole kilo of 'the drug ecstasy'. Nearly blew my clarkies to chutney town. Next time someone offered me 'the drug ecstasy' I told them: NO, I DON'T USE THE HORSE.
[n/a] klosterfobik › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 11-Aug-04/7:59 PM Reply
What the hell is a clarkie?Can you smoke ecstacy?I usaully stick
it up my anus and let it disolve right into my bloodstream.Oh by the way your poem was'nt bad or really good either but still better than godswife's best. -7-
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › klosterfobik 12-Aug-04/4:10 AM Reply
Don't even know what a clarkie is!? Obviously you're a total n00b when is comes to drugs. And yes, of course you can smoke an E n00b.